Apply deep revision strategies to the essay given

Apply deep revision strategies to the essay given here ("Language"). Deep revision analysis involves:
- Devising a new thesis, or focus statement that is perhaps more creative or simply more well-defined; - Revising the body paragraphs of your paper to more overtly connect them to the thesis statement;
- Adding new supporting arguments that incorporate new rhetorical strategies (description, narration, compare/contrast, definition)
- Revising paragraphs that contain more than one supporting argument (see this week’s recommended reading on paragraph development)
- Constructing a new conclusion
- Length: Approximately 1500 words
- Additionally, after the revision is done, add another section, and craft a short reflection description (one to two paragraphs) describing the changes and transformations you made in undertaking this deep revision.
- This will also include information about your surface editing efforts. -- this is an important part so add this section at then end titled "Reflection description"