Modification for a comparative paper

requirements from the student:

  This is a comparative paper. 

· Mainly need to modify the grammar first. 

· And embellish/modify every topic sentence of each body paragraph and the conclusion.

· Need to add transition words, like conjunctions, to make the essay more fluent, some places are too rigid.

· Modify some bad descriptions.

· Need to add more content.

· Anyway, modify in the way that you think will make the paper better.

due in next 8 hrs