ESSAY

My teacher's feedback from before

Try to avoid simplistic transitions like  "first, secondly", etc, No need to say "In conclusion".

ALL information, summary, paraphrasing, and quoting – MUST be cited  in the body of the paper, or "in-text" 

Here is a helpful page:

http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/747/02/

 For example, the reader doesn't know what the page numbers refer to which source, so use the LAST NAME as well. 

Now for the next essay, you will Take a Stand; the paper will include a proper introductory and concluding paragraph, and you will pick one side of the issue, while acknowledging the opposing side, using the language of concession and refutation in the structure of the argument, with logical premises