Discussion Topic

Your hook should be from a current event that has to do with your topic and side IT

SHOULD GRAB MY ATTENTION!

REMEMBER PATHOS! USE A CURRENT EVENT THAT HAS TO DO WITH YOUR TOPIC AND YOUR SIDE

Then you need to give me background on topic what’s going on with your topic and what has happened in the past (example: for death penalty Tell me how many states currently

have the death penalty what is history of it - briefly)

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Hello Andres! My name is Cath B, and I look forward to working with you on this Essay Center Review to improve your writing today. Let's get started!

*Writing Strength: You've given some good information from the sources you listed to present both your position and the views of the opposition. This shows that you are able to think critically not only about your view of the

situation, but that you are also able to acknowledge the side that you don't necessarily agree with.

*Andres 12774282, you requested help with Content Development: Andres, some of your statements can do with a bit of explanation, especially where you present them as questions. When you're taking a position about a topic, make sure you explain your position clearly rather than asking your reader direct questions about it. Your introduction should be a good place to

develop specific ideas about your position so your reader can see clearly what you will be focusing on in the body of your work. Let's take a look at these questions you ask:

Do humas believe only a few are causing this problem and is part of government’s and/or leaders to address this global issue? How people are contributing to the solution, and don’t point the finger or issue to a leader, local authorities and government?

Your reader might be a little confused about what you want to say about these questions. Do you believe that most people have these views? Are people generally shifting the blame to others rather than taking some of the responsibility? What are your answers to these questions? What will you say about these things? Be careful to make clear statements about your position to strengthen your arguments rather than

raising questions about what you and others may think.

*Andres 12774282, you requested help with Introduction/Conclusion: When it comes to your conclusion, another thing to be sure of is to use this final paragraphs to provide

your reader with a brief overview of the main points you made in the body of your work. This paragraph should also not contain any new information and would most likely be without any quotes. Let's take a look at your current conclusion:

“The net effect of these anomalous winds is a cooling in the 2012 global average surface air temperature of 0.1–0.2 degree Celsius, which can account for much of the hiatus in surface warming observed since 2001”. Wrote Australian researcher led by Matthew England of the University of New South Wales ( Bastasch, 2014).

This reads more like another body paragraph than a conclusion.

Your conclusion should begin by stating why you believe in your position and then saying why you believe in your position. This should be done in such a way that your reader will feel you have made a good point. Remember,

your purpose is to convince your reader of your viewpoint, even after acknowledging the opposite opinion.

Use of Resources One more thing to look out for is the format of your citations. Your reference list seems to be in the MLA style. However, all your in-text citations contain the date of publication, which is not a

requirement of MLA. Let's take a look at some of your citations: ( Bastasch ,2014) ( Abraham, John 2021 ).

Another thing I've noticed here is that some of your citations include both the last name and first

name of the authors. Your job here is to make sure what information you need between the brackets and to follow this format consistently throughout your work. Summary of Next Steps:

 Make sure you explain all your ideas fully.

 Create a conclusion that provides a summary of the main points you made.

 Check your citations and make sure they're in a consistent format.

Thank you for submitting your essay for a review, Andres. I enjoyed helping you with this step in the

revision process. Have a good day! ~Cath B

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Arango 1

Andres F Arango

Professor Sleeter

ENG 1101-60053

Sep 22, 2021

The Battle of Madre Earth and Humans

How humanity is contributing to save the planet or destroy it is based on who you ask.

If people ask the scientist and the ecologist, they are saying humans are destroying the planet. If

people ask politicians or big corporations they will say is all just conspiracy ( they just want to

profit and grow their selfish economy).

The scientific fact on which everyone agrees are that, as a result of using coal, oil, and natural

gas, the carbon dioxide content of the air is increasing during this period of about one hundred

years ( Sallie Baliunas, 255 ). [Be careful not to contradict yourself here. If everyone believes

this, how can you say that politicians and big corporations don't? Are they not part of

"everybody?" Add a bit of explanation for this.] It really feels there is such a thing as a global

warming by experiencing the different changes in the climate; winters in Florida are warmer,

more storms, more active and stronger hurricanes, more flooding , more natural disasters.

Do humas believe only a few are causing this problem and is part of government’s and/or leaders

to address this global issue? How people are contributing to the solution, and don’t point the

finger or issue to a leader, local authorities and government?

Humans are the main reason planet earth is getting destroyed and polluting the environment

causing global warming.

One of the reasons is our oceans are getting warmer and contributing to climate

breakdown. There is an article by “John P. Adams” that ask: Does a more stable ocean

matter for humans? It does, and we will feel the effects. Humans have made the oceans

more stable, and the result will be more extreme weather and the acceleration of climate

change. One example of why this is happening is; when you heat up air, the warmer air

want to rise, like a hot-air balloon. The rising motion is caused by the changing density of

the air, a process scientist refer to as buoyancy ( Abraham, Jhon 2021).

This is the same thing in the oceans . warm water is less dense than cold waters. In

Oceans, water tends to stratify, with warmer, less dense water sitting atop colder, more

dense water. This is refer as a “stable” configuration.

Sometimes the waters are not stable. For example, the upper waters of the ocean can

suddenly become heavier. This causes the water to fall from the surface towards the

ocean floor. Waters near the ocean floor are then brought up to the surface where mixing

occurs.

Another fact is the saltiness of the water. The saltier the water is, the more dense it is.

Fresher waters are less dense. When warm water forms the top level of the ocean,

evaporation of liquid water into the air removes water molecules and increases the

saltiness of the water, which then causes the water to fall and mixing to occur.

So mixing is affected by both temperature and saltiness ( Abraham, John 2021 ).

[The following sentences seem to start addressing a different idea from just the

oceans and their contribution to global warming. Consider starting a new paragraph

here.] There is another article by “Gale opposing views online Collection” that gives Climate

change predictions, because climate science measures changes that occur on a regional or

global scale over a long period of time, it can be difficult to provide definitive answers to

specific questions like "When did climate change begin?" However, since the 1990s, numerous

studies have provided evidence of a consensus in the scientific community that anthropogenic

climate change is occurring. These studies included surveys as well as analyses of peer-reviewed

articles. At least 97 percent of actively publishing climate scientists around the world agree that

human activities have contributed to rising global temperatures. Most also agree that the

consequences may be devastating, though the exact nature of the changes are difficult to predict

(Gale, 2020).:

Effects of global Warming: The current and potential future consequences of global warming

remain an issue of great debate and uncertainty, and some researchers predict dramatic and

serious problems for future generations. Warmer oceans could result in stronger and more

frequent hurricanes. As temperatures climb, some regions could experience frequent heat waves

along with devastating droughts and wildfires. During the 1990s and the 2000s (Gale, 2020).

There are also the other side of the fence that believes climate change is a hoax, or something

created by the opposition in political parties to scare citizens of the different parts of the world.

a. Many people around the world does not believe humas are causing the “ Climate

change” or “Global warming”. [Why are you using quotation marks for "Climate change"

and "Global warming?" Why are "climate" and "global" capitalized? Make sure of your

reasons for this format and use it in such a way that your reader understands these

reasons.] This oppositions believing humans are not the cause are politicians. There is an article

by Michael Bastasch on the “Daily Caller” saying; 95% of global warming models are wrong.

Former NASA scientist Dr. Roy Spencer says that climate models used by government agencies

to create policies “have failed miserably.” Spencer analyzed 90 climate models against surface

temperature and satellite temperature data, and found that more than 95 percent of the models

“have over-forecast the warming trend since 1979, whether we use their own surface temperature

dataset (HadCRUT4), or our satellite dataset of lower tropospheric temperatures ( Bastasch

,2014). Another claim is from “Dr. Roy Spencer”; Climate scientists have been baffled by the

17-year pause in global warming. At least eight explanations have been offered to explain the

lapse in warming, including declining solar activity and natural climate cycles. Some scientists

have even argued that increased coal use in China has caused the planet to cool slightly. But

there does not seem to be any solid agreement on what caused global surface temperatures to

stop rising. The latest explanation from climate scientists is that Pacific trade winds have caused the planet to stop warming. Stronger winds in the last two decades may have forced warmer

water deeper while bringing cooler water to the surface.

“The net effect of these anomalous winds is a cooling in the 2012 global average surface air

temperature of 0.1–0.2 degree Celsius, which can account for much of the hiatus in surface

warming observed since 2001”. Wrote Australian researcher led by Matthew England of the

University of New South Wales ( Bastasch, 2014).