WRITING ACTIVITY 4
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Writing Activity 3
Pragya Pachhai
ENG- Research & Writing
Professor: Maryrose Kasraie
Date: March 15, 2019
Rough Draft
Today, less than one-third of American families are "Traditional". Half of the women now return to work soon after childbirth. Parents are resorting to childcare. 78% of families use some sort of childcare. The age from 0.3 years old in a child's life is critical of his/her future development. The child finds himself in this situation more often than not due to their limited knowledge.
It’s important as parents or someone working with children to give them accurate information on where they are with regards to their personal growth process which includes learning their environment expectations of them and skill sets. As a child becomes increasingly more independent. They have an ever-growing need to understand themselves and their environment. This need is for survival purposes. This is why this kind of information is so important to them. If a child is so not getting the noise that they need at the right time. They will use what little they know from previous experience. To come up with their own conclusions about where they are. The less information they have the more likely these conclusions are going to be wrong and that will put the child at unnecessary risk.
Children will always encounter risk is part of the growing process. The risks that put a person in danger later in life. The danger to bullying indoctrination, manipulation, physical harm and overall life harming decisions. If the child is not given the information they need about their development, their environment, and of the relevant expectations of themselves then they are going to put in a position where they are vulnerable to dangerous. Children are born ready to learn. They cultivate 85% of their intellect, personality, and skills by age five (Wisconsin Council on Children & Families, 1). Research shows that children who spend all day in childcare have more behavioral issues than children who are cared for at home. Getting in tune with children's needs will help us guide their behaviors. The time in your arms is only a short one yet the memories of love and availability last a lifetime (Dr. Bill Sears, 2).
Although the time to spend with the baby is very less because they grow very fast but when we give our full time and effort to our child will be the greatest memories for a lifetime.
Strong secure and bond connection before correction. The attitude that we have as a parent is what our kids will learn from us and more than what we tell them. They don’t remember what you try to teach them, they only remember what you are (Jim Henson, 3). For a child to develop good behavior, they need one-on-one attention with consistent loving discipline. So, we need to teach our children to obey when it matters most. Children are like a mirror, what they see and hear they do to be a reflection for them (K. Health, 4). The child doesn't learn social skills just by being around another child, they learn through modeling and observing adult behavior.
A commitment to unearthing the emotional and conditional legacies of your mind (Dr. SHEFALI, 5). We have all inherited so much baggage from culture and from unconscious parents and their ancestors. As a result, we grow into these legacies without ever questioning how do they work me? Who am I in all of this? What is my truth in all if this? So, we live off the prescriptive checklist, then we are somehow lesser than and when we do this with a child who has come into this world with a throbbing spirit desirous of a kind of figuring it out, and we have kind of already ruined that chance. We always need to believe is success and failure and beauty and achievement. So, the process of consciousness in parenting may date that the parent did not hand over that prescription.
In order for the parent to not hand that over. It means that they have to come to let go of that prescription themselves. They have had to somehow deconstruct their own emotional legacies and find their own truth. So, that they can then unleash it in their child. The parents of the 1950s were the most unusual generation of the 20th century. These are the people who had grown up in the depression. They had a experienced real tough times when they were children and when they were teenagers and then World War 2 hit as many of them were just reaching adulthood and they had the trauma of the war and then after all that they reached the 1950s at a time when the U.S was tremendously prosperous as we’ve never seen it before and I think they reacted that prosperity and they reacted strongly to all of the trauma of the depression and the war by turning inward a bit by marrying young by emphasizing home and family. It is a perfect setting in which the youth culture in a certain sense could blossom life the suburbs were organized around the child again. They were the center of attention a rat endless round of little league games and PTA meetings etc. So, it was in suburbs in a certain sense that this message about the importance and the uniqueness and the generational potency associated with these children.
In the average American family today, children are the object of more concentrated thought and concern than the young of any previous generation or out of any increasing understanding of child psychology has come to an awareness the children are real people with individual personalities which must be respected and encouraged (Doug McAdam, Sociology Dept. Head, 6). This was a distinctly new way to be raised in the world and it allowed for a whole generation that I suppose we would now call spoiled children which from another point of view simply meant a child who had very little high expectations in life with respect to freedom and happiness. They thought life was about being free and about being happy and carried that expectation forward into high school and into college and brought with them a kind of level of expectation that was simply unprecedented in (Andrew & Jane Takas, Raised 5 children, 7).
I think it will be better to have a license before having a baby. I believe that America would be a better place if this law were to be made. I think everyone knows that at least one person who’s a parent that has no business being one. There are many reasons as to why and how the law of having a license before having a child should be made. Probably having a child is a huge responsibility. People have licenses to show that they are responsible enough to be allowed to do that thing are to renew licenses for many things. So, why not make it a requirement to obtain a license for having a child. This log would also help with keeping the population down. I also believe that this law should be made because there are many criminal and abusive individuals who should not be parents.
Sources
1. Dr. Shefali. November 1, 2010. The Conscious Parent: Transforming Ourselves, Empowering our children.
https://drshefali.com/the-conscious-parent/
2. Doug McAdam. July 14, 2004. “Building a Social Movement for America’s Children: What Explains the Glaring Gap Between Public Concern and Political Action When it Comes to Children’s Wellbeing?”
https://www.memphis.edu/benhooks/creative-works/pdfs/dougpaper2.pdf
3. Dr. Bill Sears. 2018. “Attachment Parenting”.
https://www.askdrsears.com/topics/parenting/attachment-parenting
4. Wisconsin Council. November 11, 2016. “Children & Families”. What are good parenting plans?
https://www.collabdivorce.com/good-parenting-plan/
5. Thomas Fleming Author of the politics of human Nature. November 9, 2012. “Back to the Drawing Board.
https://fleming.dailymail.co.uk/
Feedback Reflection
Feedback from Writing Activity 2
You need to provide concrete evidence from research. This sentence is very difficult to understand. What do you want to persuade your audience to do? In addition, remember that the thesis statement belongs at the end of the introduction. PRONOUN error. Review the grammar appendices in the web text and use Grammarly and tutor.com to help. Edit the essay carefully. Do not shift point of view; please use only third person POV. Do not use first person POV (I/we) or second person POV (you/your).
How Feedback was used
The feedback used to notice how to identifies a revision needs to explain the concept behind it. It shows how to revise to improve your writing in that area of your paper. You should always work on your revise. Then review your paper embedded comments can either support the advice given by the instructor response form or point out new issues to address. It teaches us how to identify and fix errors. To improve your writing skills long term.
How feedback will help with future writing?
We learn the weaknesses that we all have. We will able to fix our weakness from where it is coming through to make it better and not only that but other weaknesses of mine, we pointed out that means we will know about them so, that we can work to improve them forward. It can be really difficult to hear that you’re not so good at something even if you already know that still sucks to hear but it’s super important for us. The more weaknesses are pointed out to you the more you have to work on. So, you can become a better writer overall. It is also about knowing what nailed at what people loved about your story. We feel good because we get a confidence boost. Feedback is also about people telling us what was great and what they really felt drawn to our story. That's a huge confidence boost. And at last, we end up with a far better product that we actually are proud of.