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Denise Niyomugeni
Dair Arnold
ENG 1201.215
13 October 2020
Summertime City
Many people do not realize the benefits of teaching and letting our children socialize at a
young age. Kadir Nelson photograph was uploaded on December 18th,2019 on The New Yorker
Magazine Cover called, “Summertime City.” I believe the overall argument and his purpose of
this image are to show people especially parents the happiness of children when they spend time
outside of their apartment and play with other kids.
The rhetorical appeals that operate in this painting is pathos because there are more than
seven kids in this photograph playing in the back of their apartment and 95% of those children
have a smile on their face which indicate their emotion. This means that most kids love playing
outside with others instead of staying inside of their homes. I would like my readers to see
positive outcomes toward children when they spend time playing outdoors with other children as
an important part of a child’s life. Interacting with other children impacts them in several ways:
provides good mental exercise, promotes personal development, and develops social skills.
Specifically, I can relate to this cover because of my background. I was born and raised in a
village called Gihembe Refugee Camp, where I and the kids in my village would spend most of
our free time playing together. I consider myself as being a lucky person to have grown up in a
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generation where playing outdoors was a regular occurrence, where boys and girls played
together in mixed ability and mixed age groups.
I have nieces and nephews here in America, and I wanted to continue the great experiences that
I had as child by encouraging them to play outdoors with other children instead of letting them
stay indoors. Nelson’s painting shows how happy children are when they are outdoors and
playing with each other. It is exactly the same reaction my nieces and nephews get when I tell
them that we’re going to play outside. My argument for this paper is to support parents to help
them feel confidents about letting their children play together outside. Once they understand the
benefits, I feel confident they will agree.
Finally, it may be concluded that the purpose of the image is to show the happiness kids
get when they get out of their house and spend time with other kids playing outside.
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Work Cited
Kadir Nelson, “With Kids Around an Open Hydrant.” The New Yorker. 18 December 2019.
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Peer Feedback Questions for the Visual Analysis - Essay #2.docx
English 1201 / Peer Feedback Questions
Essay Writer's Name:
Essay’s Title:
Peer Reviewer’s Name:
Read through the paper completely before answering any of the following questions.
1. Does the introduction draw your attention and make you want to read on? If not, make suggestions for improvement.
2. In the first couple of sentences of the introduction, does your classmate identify the genre and context of the image (where and when it was published; what was happening in the world at the time of publication; who the artist or graphic designer is)? If not, please help your classmate add this information.
3. Does your classmate make a claim about the image in terms of what the image is presenting as its argument? If this isn’t clearly articulated, please provide detailed suggestions for revising this important piece of information.
4. Is your classmate’s thesis clearly stated? In other words, do you know the focus of the writer’s response to the image? Does he/she find the image to be effective/persuasive? Does the writer clearly and carefully articulate how the image works to persuade? Make sure this articulation is detailed and takes the reader back to the image again and again.
5. Does the writer discuss the audience of the image and give reasons and examples as support? Is this organized into a paragraph with a clear topic sentence?
6. Do all the topic sentences relate to the thesis statement? Mark any that don’t and write the reason that they don’t. What you are doing here is helping your classmate write a unified, cohesive essay.
7. If there is text in or with the image, does the writer address the language used and analyze their effect on the overall argument presented by the image?
8. Are the rhetorical appeals in the image identified by your classmate? Are there symbolic (historical, cultural, political, and/or religious, for example) elements that the writer can discuss to clarify the appeal to the viewer?
9. Is there enough explanation in each paragraph for you to understand the point that your classmate is making? If not, indicate where more explanation is needed.
10. Compare the thesis and the concluding paragraph. Can you see a logical connection between the two and not just a repetition of information? If not, make suggestions for improvement.
11. Underline any sentences that are unclear and need to be revised for clarity.
12. What is the most interesting part of the essay?
13. Do you have any overall suggestions for improvement? Please be specific.
14. Has your classmate included the image in his/her essay (as fig.1), referred to it throughout, and included its MLA citation on a separated Works Cited page?
15. What techniques or strategies does your classmate use to communicate his/her argument clearly and fairly that you would like to try in your own Visual Analysis?