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Part of your responsibility as a student in this course is to provide quality feedback to your peers that will help them to improve their writing skills. This worksheet will assist you in providing that feedback. To highlight the text and type over the information in the boxes on this worksheet, double-click on the first word.

Name of the draft’s author: Gifty Adjei

Name of the peer reviewer: Melissa Temple

Reviewer

After reading through the draft one time, write a summary (3-5 sentences) of the paper that includes your assessment of how well the essay meets the assignment requirements as specified in the syllabus and the rubric.

Type 3-5 Sentence Summary Here

After reviewing your essay, it has come to my attention that the writer has met most of the assignment requirements that were specified in the syllabus and rubric. The requirements met include the writer’s word count, which is 825, the writer’s essay focused on the subject at hand, and the writer did provide two outside sources. However, I did notice that some of the writer’s in-text citations did not match their references and their references were not arranged alphabetically by the last name. Overall, I believe the writer did A great job.

After a second, closer reading of the draft, answer each of the following questions. Positive answers will give you specific elements of the draft to praise; negative answers will indicate areas in need of improvement and revision. Please be sure to indicate at least three positive aspects of the draft and at least three areas for improvement in reply to the questions at the bottom of this worksheet.

Rhetorical Analysis Content and Ideas

· How effectively does the thesis statement identify the main points that the writer would like to make about the public document he or she is analyzing?

The writer effectively wrote the thesis statement that identifies the main points that the writer is trying to convey.

· How successful is the writer’s summary of the public document under study?

The writer’s summary of the public document under study is well written. As well as, very informational on ADHD.

· How effective is the writer’s explanation and evaluation of the rhetorical situation, genre, and stance?

The writer’s explanation and evaluation of the rhetorical situation, genre, and stance were well thought out and executed.

· How persuasively is evidence used to support assertions and enrich the essay?

The writer does provide persuasive evidence to support their assertions and ultimately enriches the essay. Examples of this include stating “A parent’s work is rarely finished…” making A parent feel cared for and therefore will listen to what you have to say. Then the writer comes in with facts on ADHD such as “if the problem is not treated during childhood the influences can carry on into adulthood”. Persuading A parent agrees with your assertions.

· How effectively does the essay’s content support the thesis by analyzing the document and evaluating its effectiveness according to strategies from chapter 3 of Writing with Purpose? The writer effectively writes content to support their thesis.

Organization

· How effectively does the introduction engage the reader while providing an overview of the paper? The writer does provide A great hook to the essay ultimately making one engaged with their work.

· Please identify the writer’s thesis and quote it in the box below.

The CDC made a whole website page planned for guardians or youthful grown-ups who need or need more data on ADHD. The site acquired believability utilizing ethos by archiving assets and showing legitimate measurements, showed poignancy or profound allure by attempting to comprehend the feelings of parents with children who experience the ill effects of ADHD, and showed logos by having the site in a legitimate and sensible request.

· How effectively do the paragraphs develop the topic sentence and advance the essay’s ideas? The writer did A good job developing the topic sentences in each paragraph that led to the advancement of the essay as a whole.

· How effectively does the conclusion provide a strong, satisfying ending, not a mere summary of the essay? The writer effectively gave A satisfying ending.

Format

· How closely does the paper follow APA formatting style? Is it double-spaced in 12 pt. Times New Roman font? Does it have 1" margins? Does it use headers (page numbers using appropriate header function)? Does it have a proper heading (with student’s name, date, course, and instructor’s name)?

· You have a great APA format from what I see

Yes

No

· Are all information, quotations, and borrowed ideas cited in parenthetical APA format?

Yes

· Are all sources listed on the references page in APA format?

Yes

No As previously mentioned the in-text citations do no math the references and the references that are listed are not arranged in alphabetical order by the author’s last name.

· Is the required minimum number of sources listed?

Yes

No

Language Use and Style

· Are the voice and tone of the essay effective in characterizing ideas and creating the appropriate mood? If “No,” please provide examples of ineffective or inappropriate voice and tone.

Yes

No

· How effectively does the paper incorporate a variety of sentence structures that strengthen the ideas, create vitality, and avoid choppiness in the writing?

Yes

No

· How would you assess the writer’s diction (i.e., word choice)? Does the writer use active verbs, concrete nouns, and precise words?

Yes

No

Grammar and Mechanics

· Does the writer use proper grammar, punctuation, and spelling? If “No,” please provide examples of errors in need of correction.

Yes

No

· Is the writing clear and comprehensible throughout the draft? If “No,” please provide examples in need of improvement.

Yes

No

Three things that I liked about your draft are:

1. Having the essay automatically start telling you about ADHD and really getting into it is what I liked most about the essay.

2. The writer’s choice of vocabulary was also something I really enjoyed throughout the text.

3. The examples the writer gave kept me engaged as well.

Three things that could be improved are:

1. In-text citations

2. APA format of references

3. References