Expository Revision draft

Task

Revise and resubmit the expository draft you turned in last week (attached in upload). Keep in mind the difference between revision and proofreading and note this is a revision draft. When revising, keep in mind the purpose, audience, and rhetorical expectations of this particular mode. In this case, the rhetorical mode is comparison and contrast, so refer to the task items from the draft work prompt and the rhetorical expectations of this draft type. Here is a great, brief resource (Links to an external site.) from the Purdue Online Writing Lab that breaks the revision process down into manageable steps. 

Format

Your revised draft should be at least 1,000 words. Also, after revising your draft, write a paragraph explaining the revisions you made to your draft from last week (attached in uploads); mention both global and local revisions. (This paragraph does not count toward your word count. Your draft needs to be at least 1,000 words!) Add this to the end of the draft and label it "Revision Explanation." Turn in your revised draft. Your paper should be in standard APA format. No outside research should be used for this work.

Criteria

Content and Development

The revision is substantive and effective. To note: The draft is at least 1,000+ words. Major revisions (i.e., noticeable changes in content and organization) are evident. The revision remains in line with the assigned rhetorical mode(s). The revision contains all the elements of a successful draft: an effective thesis, sufficient and logical support for that thesis, and a tone and style appropriate for the intended audience and chosen rhetorical mode(s). Inter- and intra-paragraph content is effectively organized (spatially, temporally, logically, or by order of importance) and makes use of topic sentences and appropriate transitional expressions. The introduction and conclusion are engaging, cohesive, and appropriate to their position in the revision.

Readability and Style

The tone is appropriate to the content. Sentences are complete, clear, and concise. Sentences are well-constructed, with consistently strong, varied syntax. Sentence transitions are present and maintain the flow of thought. Draft meets all the requirement of APA formatting.