Llt weak 4 peer review paper 1

Eunpyeong Kim

Jun 20, 2020 2:05 PM

Hi Ibrahim! The title is not sure what it exactly is. I think you would want to address women in Heart of Darkness. I sort of understanding the thesis. The essay is an organized introduction, body, and conclusion, but I am a little confused in the conclusion part. I only saw a few quotations and one source in the essay, and the quote is supported through the essay. I felt like that the essay mostly addresses the story, not a research paper. But it is well explained that even if someone does not know the story, it is easily understandable. The essay provides Work Cited with in-text citations, but it needs to secondary sources minimum three. I also see some spelling and punctuation mistakes. I do not see the author’s name, instructor’s name, course number, and due date. I think these will be added for the final submission.

Bonita Griffin

Jun 20, 2020 8:36 PM

Hi Ibrahim,

I could not find a title of this individual’s paper but the title of the original work was interesting.  Yes, the subject and author was identified in the first paragraph.  There was no thesis but the introduction was stated and kept in view throughout.  Organization is reasonable and reader can easily identify each point. It is difficult to identify paragraphs but topic sentences or ideas are present.  Generalizations are appropriately made based on the evidence but not based on any brief quotations from the text.  Yes, the opening paragraph interesting and, by its end, focused on the topic. The final paragraph is conclusive without being repetitive.  If there is no summary.  I can not answer because I really can not say what the author intended or if a quotation would be adequate.  Present tense is used to describe the work and action.  Yes, I am assuming that the audience is clear and unfamiliar terms are explained.  This appears to be a combination of other questions but this work misses all requirement of this question except maybe spacing and margins.  This paper includes some links associated with other works, citations are missing or incorrect.  It doesn’t appear that Grammarly was applied to address punctuation and spelling, basic errors indicate the need for proof reading. Since it’s a cut and pasted version, I can not assess margins.  I could not identify the required identifications since the cover page was not included.