Revise the article and complete the outline

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SophySouthAFrica2ndattemptsecond8weeks.docx

Informative Speech Evaluation

Course: SPCH 1311

Instructor: Dr. Dean

Semester: Spring 2020

Topic : South Africa

Student Name: Qian Chen

Points Explanation: 0(Missing) – the element is not present in the speech or outline and will not be awarded points

1 - (Incoherent) – the element is present in the outline but not the speech

2 - (Poor) – the element is present in the outline and speech but is unclear

3 - (Fair) – the element is present and somewhat clear but could be improved for a college level course

4 - (Good) – the element is present, clear, and meets the expectations for a college level course

5 - (Excellent) – the element is not only present and clear, but exceeds expectations for a college level course

0 pts

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Comments

Introduction – 20 points

Attention Getter

x

You forgot to follow the instructions regarding the introduction. -20 points

Credibility/Audience Motivation

x

Thesis

x

Preview of main points

x

Body – 50 points

Main points - Development

x

Good quality information presented.

Your transition statements smoothly link your main points

1st citation – missing -5 points

2nd citation – missing -5 points

3rd citation - missing - 5 points

Main points - Organization

x

Unique, interesting content

x

Supporting details

x

Transitions - good transitions

Research/Accuracy

x

3 verbal citations articulated

x

Minimum elements included in verbal citations

x

Conclusion – 20 points

Summary of main points

x

You did not follow the instructions regarding how to write the conclusion. You cannot introduce new information in a conclusion. You say “In conclusion” to signal the end of your presentation. Then, you say, “first, I shared with you…second, I shared, and third and last I shared..”

--20 points

Memorable closing remark

x

Delivery/Expression – 30 points

Vocal delivery

--volume/pitch/rate/emphasis

-- vocal fillers

x

Effective vocal emphasis and volume

You need hand gestures to add physical energy to your presentation.

Please smile as you speak. This is important in U.S. American culture.

You control your nervousness well.

Extemporaneous – Use of notes

x

Eye contact

x

Physical delivery

--posture/gestures/facial affect

-- distractions

x

Within 4-6 minute time limit (-1 for every 15 seconds over/under)

x

Dressed appropriately

x

Outline and Works Cited – 3 points

General and Specific Purpose

x

You need two pieces of identifying information to meet the minimum citation standard for each research source -10 points

Full Sentences

x

Standard outline formatting

x

Internal references/match verbal citations/highlighted or bolded

x

Works cited – formatted correctly – corresponding entries

x

Potential Deductions

Audience requirement waived for this semester

Late

Other Deductions (noise, lighting, recording issues, etc.)

Total Points*: -65 points = 85/150 = 57% F

Dear Sophie,

Your verbal delivery is excellent. Thank you for carefully reading these feedback comments. They are offered with care and respect. I am attaching the El Salvador country outline for you to study. You need to make the changes noted above. Follow the El Salvador outline; watch the El Salvador speech to learn how to give verbal credit to your research sources.

Dr. Dean

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