Management Communication
Your Name: J.R. Student
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Sample PR Assignment with Notes
Look to page two for the sample, and pages three and four for ideas on how it might be reviewed.
Before you begin, read the full Peer Review Assignment Guidelines, posted on BB, for
information not included in this document.
This document contains the materials you will need to complete the peer review assignment:
1. Instructions
2. Sample message for review
3. The rubric to use in your review.
Instructions:
1) Insert your name in the header above (to access, double click on the space).
2) Read the sample provided, carefully considering its strengths and weaknesses. Don’t insert
comments on the sample, except as directed in the Assignment Guidelines.
3) Complete the rubric and calculate the number of major sentence errors by type, following the
instructions in the Assignment Guidelines.
4) Below the rubric, provide two to three pieces of substantive feedback, following instructions in
the Assignment Guidelines.
5) When complete, save this document as a PDF file, labeled “yoursurname_PR” (e.g.,
jones_PR.pdf) and submit it on Blackboard.
Grading:
Your assignment will be graded using the marking guidelines described in the Peer Review Assignment
Guidelines.
Your Name: J.R. Student
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The Message for Review
To:
Dear Colleagues.
Dfdkjdl dfsdjfl fjdkfdroeuwre eirue sjeuf ewuf asi idf. Teiruwi jsdjfliur dfjf owerm sdkweio. Dfkldf eor
skjdf erulsj dfjkerjfsldfj ekwjer. Dfdkjdl dfsdjfl fjdkfdroeuwre eirue sjeuf ewuf asi idf. Teiruwi jsdjfliur
dfjf owerm sdkweio. Dfkldf eor skjdf erulsj dfjkerjfsldfj ekwjer. Dfdkjdl dfsdjfl fjdkfdroeuwre eirue
sjeuf ewuf asi idf. Teiruwi jsdjfliur dfjf owerm sdkweio. Dfkldf eor skjdf erulsj dfjkerjfsldfj ekwjer.
• Dflkwpeork dkjfwo sdkwier kdf.
• Fdfkwerf jslfkweo irj.
• Dfsdwekjr ewrwer wefsdjw.
Dfdkjdl dfsdjfl fjdkfdroeuwre eirue sjeuf ewuf asi idf. Teiruwi jsdjfliur dfjf owerm sdkweio. Dfkldf eor
skjdf erulsj dfjkerjfsldfj ekwjer.
Dfdkjdl dfsdjfl fjdkfdroeuwre eirue sjeuf ewuf asi idf. Teiruwi jsdjfliur dfjf owerm sdkweio. Dfkldf eor
skjdf erulsj dfjkerjfsldfj ekwjer. Dfdkjdl dfsdjfl fjdkfdroeuwre eirue sjeuf ewuf asi idf. Teiruwi jsdjfliur
dfjf owerm sdkweio. Dfkldf eor skjdf erulsj dfjkerjfsldfj ekwjer. Dfdkjdl dfsdjfl fjdkfdroeuwre eirue
sjeuf ewuf asi idf. Teiruwi jsdjfliur dfjf owerm sdkweio. Dfkldf eor skjdf erulsj dfjkerjfsldfj ekwjer. This is
a sentence error, two sentences have been joined incorrectly. Dfdkjdl dfsdjfl fjdkfdroeuwre eirue sjeuf
ewuf asi idf. Teiruwi jsdjfliur dfjf owerm sdkweio. Dfkldf eor skjdf erulsj dfjkerjfsldfj ekwjer. Dfdkjdl
dfsdjfl fjdkfdroeuwre eirue sjeuf ewuf asi idf. Teiruwi jsdjfliur dfjf owerm sdkweio. Dfkldf eor skjdf
erulsj dfjkerjfsldfj ekwjer. Dfdkjdl dfsdjfl fjdkfdroeuwre eirue sjeuf ewuf asi idf. Teiruwi jsdjfliur dfjf
owerm sdkweio. Dfkldf eor skjdf erulsj dfjkerjfsldfj ekwjer. Dfdkjdl dfsdjfl fjdkfdroeuwre eirue sjeuf
ewuf asi idf. Teiruwi jsdjfliur dfjf owerm sdkweio. Dfkldf eor skjdf erulsj dfjkerjfsldfj ekwjer. Dfdkjdl
dfsdjfl fjdkfdroeuwre eirue sjeuf ewuf asi idf. Teiruwi jsdjfliur dfjf owerm sdkweio. Dfkldf eor skjdf
erulsj dfjkerjfsldfj ekwjer.
Sincerely,
Bob
Commented [AH1]: A comma splice (two sentences incorrectly joined by a comma) When looking for sentence errors, you need only consider four major sentence errors: comma splices, run-on (fused) sentences, sentence fragments, parallel structure. If an error is repeated, you need only identify it once.
Your Name: J.R. Student
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See below for commenting suggestions.
Your Assessment of the Message
Use this rubric to assess the message, and write your comments in the space at the bottom.
Content: The content of the message meets the expectations of the audience. Strong OK Weak
➢ Message shows evidence of an in-depth analysis of the elements of
communication (PAIBOC). x
➢ All essential information is included (feedback loops are avoided); message
will meet audience expectations. x
➢ Unnecessary information has been removed, and important information is
easy to access and interpret. x
Language Use and Organization: Language use and organization support the message.
Strong OK Weak
➢ Writing demonstrates ‘you attitude’ when appropriate, modified to ‘we
attitude’ or ‘subject focus’ as appropriate. x
➢ Tone is appropriate to the purpose and audience. x
➢ Sentences are clear and concise, demonstrating strong word choice. x
➢ Within and between paragraphs, ideas flow smoothly. x
➢ Organization (order of ideas) is appropriate to the purpose and audience. x
➢ Ideas are fully explained and supported by detail or example, as needed. x
Format and Visual Design: Document is professionally designed and correctly formatted.
Strong OK Weak
➢ Message is formatted following business standards (1.15 spacing, standard fonts, with all required components – including front and end matter). Brief and appropriately descriptive subject lines are included in all letters and emails. In other documents (e.g., blogs), format meets the standards discussed in class.
x
➢ Visual elements (lists, boldface font, etc.) help the reader to move easily
through the message, when appropriate. x
➢ Text and visual elements are balanced (heavy blocks of text are avoided, as
are list-like documents). x
Calculate the number of major sentence errors by type. Consider only the four major errors tested in quizzes this term (comma splices, fragments, run-on sentences, and parallel structure errors), and count each type only once. For example, if the piece has three comma splices and one fragment, there are only two error types.
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Your Name: J.R. Student
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Comments:
The reviewer will begin with a brief introduction to the comments (one or two sentences only), setting
the tone and preparing the reader for what will follow.
Order of ideas:
In the rubric, the reviewer has identified a significant problem in order of ideas. Perhaps the writer has
written an unwelcome message very directly, or a routine message indirectly. In this comment, the
reviewer should indicate the exact problem, support his or her viewpoint with MGMT 3210 principles,
and offer a solution.
The comment (and the others that follow) should be appropriate in tone for the audience (the writer),
perhaps balancing the negative news with a positive comment about the strengths noted in the rubric
assessment – this reviewer noted appropriate tone and strong you attitude, for example. Likely length
of this first comment → 150-200 words
Visual Design:
Here the reviewer would comment on visual design, highlighting good practices. He or she would likely
compliment the writer on the use of the vertical list (as long as it was used appropriately), before
commenting on the long final paragraph. Likely length of this second comment → 100 - 150 words
Information:
In the rubric, the reviewer has identified a consistent weakness in content, so it is reasonable that
he/she addresses the “I” in PAIBOC. The reviewer will identify missing information or unnecessary
information and will make suggestions for improvement. Likely length of this third comment → 100 -
150 words
Word Count: ____ must be 300-400 words in total (not including the rubric)
Note: There may be additional issues in this piece. In your review, you are only required to 1) complete
the rubric, 2) use the Word comment feature to identify major sentence errors on the document (as has
been done on the sample above), and 3) comment on two to three main concerns (these concerns should
also be reflected in your rubric assessment). You should not comment beyond these 2-3 concerns, even if
there are additional problems. For example, the reviewer’s rubric assessment has identified format
problems in this sample (a missing subject line, and an incomplete signature block). These omissions
have been identified in the rubric, but the reviewer has chosen not to comment on them, and instead
focuses on other significant concerns.