· Overall, there are many statements that are unclear. Make sure that you are proof-reading for clarity and make sure you are using terminology correctly.
“The spread of Christianity and Buddhism was facilitated through conversion and propagation of the various sociocultural groups as compared to other religions” - Unclear what you mean by this. Do you mean that certain groups spread the religions? Or that different groups were spread to other locations?
“This religion is characterized by five moral aspects that are against sexual misconduct, drug abuse, killing living things, stealing and lying.” - Even more so by the Four Noble Truths, so can you add that somewhere in the paper.
“the missionaries based their ideologies on equality in the afterlife.”- What do you mean by "equality in the afterlife"?
“During the spread of Christianity, several concepts were developed; thus the Catholic Church initiated uniformity within the religion as it was established as a religious institution.”- Unclear, and what about Christianity outside of Western Rome?
“Hence, the followers were intrinsically motivated by the ideals facilitated by the predestined mission of the founders.”- Why predestined?
“According to Wynne (2), Christianity and Buddhism were missionary denominations,” -What do you mean by “denominations”? Do you mean religions?
“Therefore, these two religions relied on the followers and the evangelists to spread the teachings, since their beliefs and confidence encouraged other people to join them.” - What are some specific historical examples of this happening? Where did the religions spread?
“ For instance, 80% of the Christians in the United States are associated with their ethnic churches. Thus, the rebuilding of their old temple, synagogue or church was their unique way of highlighting their identity as a community occupying new settlements.” - Good connection to today, but I need examples from the early time period of around 300 CE.
“Despite that both religions were characterized by challenges and difficulties, its spread was based on their messages and theological ideologies.” - Unclear what you mean here.