final research paper 9-2
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Paper Title:
No. of Pages: 7
Paper Style: APA Paper Type: Research
Taken English? Yes English as Second Language? No
Feedback Areas: Grammar & Mechanics, Sentence Structure
Paper Goals: This assignment is worth 350 points. I am not a good writer. I need help with
grammatical errors and use appropriate phrase. I need my paper to flow.
Proofing Summary:
Hello Deanna,
Thank you for submitting your research paper.
Strengths:
You've begun to gather a lot of potentially useful information here, including material from outside sources.
This helps to ensure there are plenty of detail to flesh out each topic included in the discussion.
Suggestions:
-Thesis Statement
-Essay Structure
The thesis should be framed to match the type of essay you are constructing, whether it be persuasion or
analysis functioning as the focus. Currently, the thesis states what you will discuss but is not framed in a
manner that shows what type of essay you're constructing.
Several issues with organization, grammar and mechanics have been noted throughout the essay. The
placement of quotes are important to the essay. Generally, quotes should be avoid being placed at the start or
end of the paragraphs. Specific example are covered in the essay.
If you would like to submit a revision of your paper, you are welcome to do so. We look forward to helping you
succeed!
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Consider avoiding quotes in the
introduction. The intro should be a basic
overview of the subject, to provide
general context that will help the reader
understand the subject you'll discuss.
Specific details on the subject should be
saved for the body paragraphs. The
thesis at the end of the introduction
should reflect the type of essay you're
constructing through its wording. For
example, if a persuasive essay is being
constructed, the thesis should present
the main idea of the paper as a claim on
the issue being discussed. This helps
clarify how the topics of discussion
should develop throughout the body
paragraphs.
Paragraphs should avoid ending with a
quote. There should be a statement after
each quote that gives your reason for
providing the comment, throughout the essay.
To ensure that sentence flow logically
throughout the paper, it would be
wise to end a sentence with a period
after it has expressed a full idea. This
helps to avoid issues with run-on
sentence throughout the paper.
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The main ideas that function as the
topic sentences of each body
paragraph should allude to the
supporting ideas stated in the thesis
statement. This shows that the
concepts stated in the thesis are being
used to develop the essay.
The first-person perspective
should be avoided, unless stated
otherwise by your instructor.
First level heading should be centered
above the paragraph they pertain to
throughout the paper. level one through
four headings should all use bold
lettering throughout the paper in APA.
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Quotes in the topic sentence
should be avoided. The topic
sentence should state the main
idea of the paragraph using your
own words. Quotes should come
after the focus of the paragraph
has been establish.
Et al. should be used for sources with
more than two authors after the first time
the source is cited. The first citations
using that source should state each
name.
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It should always be clear what the subject of
a sentences is, especially when transitioning
to new topics. This makes it immediately
clear what the focus of the discussion is.
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There is an issue with subject-verb
agreement in this statement. The
subject and verb in a sentence should
match in terms of number. If one is
plural the other should be plural as
well.
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Typically, the conclusion is short in
length, a concise reiteration of the
key-points of your essay, without
including new information to develop. The
conclusion should restate the thesis,
briefly summarize the paper, and then
conclude with a lasting final statement
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The conclusion should be a concise
reiteration of the key-points of your
essay, without including new information
to develop. The conclusion should
restate the thesis, briefly summarize the
paper, and then conclude with a lasting
final statement
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The title of the reference page should be
without punctuation.
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