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After reviewing your letter I have a few pieces of constructive critisism. To begin I would introduce who I am in the start of the paper, before I started stating my school attributes. A second thing that I would change is in your second paragraph. I believe that it is implied that you would like very much to work and be apart of their company. So instead of saying this, you could be using that time and space to further explain why you would benefit their company and make their lives easier. It is also implied that you are a hard worker and again you could be using that time to try and benefit yourself. A third thing I would remove from your letter, is the part about calling them and telling them to review your qualifications, and also I personally would not tell them when they should schedule an interview for you. overall i enjoyed reading your letter and wish you luck in your future endevours.

Your letter and resume are good, but there are some aspects that could change to make them even stronger. Starting at the top of your letter, I would include the company name by “Human Resources.” I personally believe this adds to the professionalism of the letter as it tells the reader exactly who it is for. Also, if possible, figure out who the head of human resources is! This will give you a one-up as the company will see that you put time and effort into researching their company and who you’d be communicating with. This helps the letter feel more personable and reader-centered. You should also include a subject before your greeting, if possible. The first sentence should be the goal of your letter, I would first mention the internship before your brief background. (Anderson, 369) The second paragraph of your letter should also be more reader-centered. I would rephrase the majority of that portion to explaining why the company’s reputation seems so great in your opinion, or why you are suitable for the position. It is not clear enough to say “an internship would be mutually beneficial and I would like it very much;” tell them why you would like it and why they would benefit from choosing you. This is also important in the third paragraph, replace your general skills with specific skills. Careful of spelling and capitalizations as well, as you forgot to capitalize “I” and had an incorrect spacing for “intern ship”. I would also look into setting up a professional email account, something simple such as your first and last name, the company does not want to hire a party animal.

As for your resume, again, email! Change that to something more professional. Also, review the correct format for a resume, you should include your contact information under your name, this would include your address, phone number, etc. (Anderson, 21-28). Your objective needs to be more specific, most people want the same goal but you should present it in a way that shows you deserve that objective. I would be more specific with the work skills that would apply to the current position, focusing on skills that will help you in the internship. I would rethink the organization of your education section, as it’s rather confusing as written. Put each school as a section and the relative information with that school, don’t forget to mention any advanced courses or classes that may show your abilities. (Anderson, 26) Also, your hobbies aren’t necessary here, unless you feel they may benefit work relationships (Anderson, 29), and include references, don’t make them request them these are very important! (Anderson, 30).