RESEARCH PROPOSAL
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As you begin your revision, you can use my feedback to help, even though I cannot address every concern. First, I will describe your paper’s strengths, and then I will offer suggestions for areas that could use attention for revision in terms of Higher-Order concerns (Assignment, Focus, Organization, and Support). After the “Help Areas” section, I’ve embedded comments through your text to offer some directed suggestions. You will find a list of “Next Steps” at the end of your text to help as you approach revision. I recommend you follow through on these suggestions and steps before submitting your draft for a second time. You can submit this paper with significant revisions to eTutoring up to three times for continuing feedback.
Strengths of this Piece:
· This piece shows that you are working with finding solutions to employee retention. I can see that you are developing new and interesting ideas for studying and analyzing these issues. In particular, it’s great to see how and why Human Resources plays a role in employee retention.
· This piece has several examples of your critical thinking skills at work. And, although some places are a bit unclear, I can see that you are finding connections between course themes and source materials.
· It looks like you have collected an appropriate number of sources. Although it’s not always clear where the information is used in your piece, I see that you are working to incorporate those ideas.
Help Areas:
A. Assignment: At this point, the draft feels disconnected from the assignment. I get a sense of how this piece addresses the “big ideas” in the assignment, but I think attention to the following would help as you revise:
a. Purpose. The assignment discusses many specific themes to address. A strong response will mention those details explicitly. Meaning, the reader should be able to find places where the paper discusses those details.
b. Report versus argument. Parts of this piece appear to be “report like” – a presentation of information without discussion. Is there a way to develop a thesis – a single statement that presents the piece’s purpose, direction, and focus?
c. Audience. Imagine this piece “stands alone” without the assignment prompt. Who do you think will be reading this piece? Why? What do you think they need to get out of it? At the moment, I think those elements are missing.
B. Organization and Focus: How you organize a paper can significantly help or hinder the clarity of your argument – and, therefore, the purpose of the piece. It can also keep the reader’s attention from straying too far from your intended focus. The best way to ensure your reader follows your argument is to make sure that your opening paragraph (including thesis statement/main argument) introduces your main points in the same order that they will appear in the body paragraphs.
a. First, the introduction should include a thesis statement that encompasses the major argumentative points to come.
b. Each body paragraph should introduce a purpose/show a focus early – preferably in the first sentence or two. This could be thought of as a “topic sentence” – a mini-thesis of the paragraph.
c. Every point of information throughout each paragraph should support the point introduced at the beginning of the paragraph (and the opening of the piece).
d. Allow for a “transitional moment” at the beginning and/or end of each paragraph. The transition should explain how and why we are shifting from one focus to the next.
C. Working with Sources: (Although this point appears last, it’s probably the most important part of any piece of writing.) I noticed your concern with plagiarism. While I can’t do a “plagiarism check,” one of the most important steps to avoiding plagiarism is citing everything. Any idea, phrase, or sentence that is inspired by or taken from a source should be clearly connected to a citation – using in-text citations. These can be either within the sentence of the text or in parenthesis at the end of the sentence.
As part of revising this piece (or doing any drafting), it will be important to incorporate in-text citations throughout the piece. It appears you have the necessary information for the sources on the references page. However, it will be crucial to identify the sentences inspired by source content. The only time when a citation isn’t necessary for every source-based sentence is an annotated bibliography. Because I’m unsure what type of piece this should be, here is a helpful example from PenState Libraries (I’ve bolded the citations and surrounding details in bold). It gives you an idea of what every source-based sentence should look like.
A few researchers in the linguistics field have developed training programs designed to improve native speakers’ ability to understand accented speech (Derwing, Rossiter, & Munro, 2002; Thomas, 2004). Their training techniques are based on the research described above, indicating that comprehension improves with exposure to non-native speech. Derwing et al. (2002) conducted their training with students preparing to be social workers, but note that other professionals who work with non-native speakers could benefit from a similar program. ( https://guides.libraries.psu.edu/apaquickguide/intext ):
This style can sound repetitive and be a bit annoying for a writer. Still, it can significantly clarify a “report” on their information (summary) versus an “analysis” based on your observations (compare/contrast), which can be the difference between a passing paper and a fail.
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Effect on Recruitment and Selection in Manufacturing Companies
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Introduction
Background of the Study
Human resources management progressed to under an essential role in making sure that companies succeed and thrive well. In most matters, the company’s success is evaluated through aspects as achieving company objectives, invasion and retention of inspired and effective educated workers, and the capacity to use their capabilities and competence well. The company’s recruiting procedure gives the foundation for hiring. It serves as a core HRM exercise that assists the organization managers and the entire company in recruiting the required individuals and subsequently keeping them for the foreseeable future. Companies progressed to be affected through wrong recruitment and selection decisions in the logic that they can hardly keep their experienced workers hence, hindering performance and acquiring additional expenses. It is thus significant for companies to ascertain the appropriate recruiting strategies and apply them to advance workers’ retention and stability. Comment by noir puma: I recommend avoiding repetition as much as possible. These sentences are in the last section. Is there a way to say this again? Comment by noir puma: I’m not sure this is the most effective word here…
Various concepts help to handle the demand of workers in the field of workers retention strategies in companies. These approaches include the Attraction-Selection Attraction (ASA) concept, which explains the necessity of looking for, recruiting, and maintains effective workers with the appropriate competencies, experience and understanding in the correct number. Another approach is the Vrooms Expectancy which also gives the directions that companies can use to advance workers’ motivation via changing workers’ performance to appreciate expectation, determination to performance expectation, and compensation valences. Appropriate organization performance is usually credited to employee performance and their capacity and encounter to operate. In this case, organizations must retain their turnover as low as possible to prevent losing their most skilled employees to contestants, thus enhancing their performance. Comment by noir puma: This sentence is a bit long, which can make it confusing. Consider breaking it up for the sake of clarity.
Recruitment includes the company decisions and exercises that impact the kind and number of individuals that apply for and eventually adopt the prevailing job opportunities. On the other hand, the selection includes corresponding the right people with the right jobs. Worker hiring and selection entails the process of collecting and evaluating data concerning whether job applicants qualify for employment. In this aspect, the procedure of recruitment and selection of employees includes company exercises that impact the kind of people applying for the vacancy and how the job offer should be taken. In addition, retaining workers is a critical matter embraced by contemporary companies as they continue to grapple with a high rate of employee turnover, low economic growth rate, and low experienced labor. It is the capacity of the companies to retain their most valuable workers to get competitive benefits and advance their competency. This study proposal aims to consider the effects of recruitments and selection exercises on worker retention in companies.
Research Problem Statement
Hiring and selection are made by the human resource department to assist companies in determining the practical sources of workers. They recruit the appropriate people and retain their job market and keep the most valuable skills. Companies can ensure that their newly recruited individuals have the needed experience, capacity, and understanding to work by undertaking the most appropriate and well-organized recruitment and selection process. In this respect, employment and selection create two most essential human resources exercises that companies can use to employ people with the experience and understanding necessary for their jobs. Thus, approaches to getting people into employment is a complex procedure that incorporates various variables. Previous research concerning recruitment and selection in companies is based on one variable in this complicated procedure, which makes their findings inconclusive. Furthermore, many studies on worker retention in the company are mainly based on human resource exercises like the interaction between worker retention and the human resource and the shared appreciation advantages of workers. Based on this point of view, this learning suggests studying the range of hiring and selection elements to detect companies in this effective procedure.
Research Question
What are the influences of hiring and selection exercises on workers’ maintenance in companies?
Will effective recruitment and selection of employees lead to productive growth in manufacturing companies?
What will be the benefits of appropriate recruitment and selection of workers in manufacturing organizations?
Research Objective
To investigate the effects of staffing and range exercises on workers retaining in companies.
The Value of the Study
It will be very tool to various companies. The research proposal will provide an inclusive insight concerning adopting effective engagement performs and the advancement of workers retention in companies. Furthermore, the suggested research will also assist in helping to improve conceptual discourse concerning recruitment exercises and the retention of workers. The analysis is thus critical to organizational activities and hiring works. The education is so relevant to both corporate does as well as employing literature. Comment by noir puma: I’m not sure I understand this sentence. Comment by noir puma: Is this your proposal? To be presented to a company? At the moment, I’m still not sure I understand the purpose of this paper and how it relates to the assignment.
Literature Review
Human resources are deemed a competitive advantage to companies since they also consider human capital and production-related capacities. Competitors can copy things like technology, but when it comes to human resources are distinctive and easy to imitate. According to Janjua (2014) cited in Pakistan (2014), a company’s personnel are among the most important factors that provide flexibility and adaptability to organizations. A business flourishes at a more incredible place with capable employees. Employees with terrible qualities can make a business collapse resulting in a downfall. A systematic and consistent recruitment and selection result in the retention of the employees in the same company since there is no movement of employees from one place to another. Retention of the employees will also guarantee long-term employment, internal promotions within the company, creating more committed employees towards the organization. Comment by noir puma: Are these ideas (and others like these) connected to sources? Even when paraphrasing, be sure to cite.
The management must try to retain its best workforce and maintain its commitment to attract additional qualified employees. Employee retention is necessary; organizations are experiencing a balance of power shifting from employers to employees. Employees can be retained and satisfied within those organizations which keep on learning that how to keep their employee satisfaction at the highest level. If there is an excess of turnover, it indicates a fundamental problem within the company. An organization needs to be familiar with retaining employees since high-performance organizations are highly desired practices. Compensation of more than the employees are paid one of the ways of having employees. With the competition rising with time, the company will be in an excellent position to fight back since the employees are more conversant with the organizational environment.
According to Asiedu-Appiah (2013), cited in Ghana, some consequences are related to employee retention in an organization. They are basing the evidence on the organizational compensation policy, especially during the recruitment and selection practices. Retention of the employees during these practices imposes unionization in the company since these employees have been together for quite some time, therefore, can understand one another. The aspect of physical and psychological health is also created among the concerned employees, resulting in maximum utilization of ideas in the company, leading to increased company production. The mining industry ends up recording increased profits and production outcomes since the employees freely exchange views and opinions on what would work the best way. Positive effects on the firm have been recorded concerning the companies’ retention of employees. Organizations seek to optimize their personnel productivity by suitable assessment and continued support and growth in handling systems. The finding concerning the mining industry in Ghana demonstrated self-efficacy in work tents to have a higher retained workforce rate, resulting in better organizational performance. The higher the organization creates a very conducive environment for the employees, the outcome is expected to be impressive. The retention of the employees in an organization is linked to the general treatment of the employees since improper employee treatment may raise difficulties when it comes to employee retention practice. Employee retention ensures that skilled personnel and experienced staff are retained.
It was argued that the company application of the techniques brought out positive outcomes in the general organization performance. Increased productivity was experienced in the number of mines. High retention of employees can save an organization from productivity loss. Better customer experience since the employees’ own experience can impact how to engage with customers. New employees may face challenges where longer time may be taken to make things happen since not conversant with the expectations of the customer needs. Satisfied employees have higher morals and capabilities, which shine all through their interaction with the customers. Quality services are offered and ensure that the customers’ needs and expectations are fully attained. Generally, the idea of HRM employee retention has a positive impact on organizational performance, and therefore it’s good to be practiced for better results.
According to ALDamoe, Yazam, & Ahmid (2012), it is evident that some HRM policies and practices perform better as compared to others. It’s upon the organization to select the best practices for adoption. A review of literature conducted by Khan (2010) identified five essential HRM practices: recruitment and selection, performance appraisal, employee participation, compensation and reward and training, and development. Among the practices were utilized in organizational performance evaluation. According to (Chaminade, 2007) retention refers to a voluntary move by an organization to create an engaging employee environment for the long term. The organization is in a position to retain skilled employees for successful organizational operations. Researchers in the HRM field have acknowledged that employee retention is one of the best recruitment and selection practices to pay attention to them. Organizations must develop retention strategies as autonomy, rewards, and image to improve the relationship between organizational performance and HRM practices. Finally, it argued that employee retention would mediate the relationship between organizational performance and human resource practices. Therefore, employee retention will enhance the general organizational performance and improve the relationship between organizational performance and HRM practices.
It was also found that employee retention has got positive effects on organizational performance regardless of the location. Loss of corporate knowledge is prevented since the staff responsible for the activities are not changed but retained. Regular customer services are not interfered with since any employee change would interfere with the usual service provision to the customers. Employee retention in the recruitment and section practices also reduces the turnover cost the organization might have incurred since it would require some training and orientation to the newly employed staff. Additional issues such as reference checks, temporary worker costs, legal training expenses, relocation costs, and security clearance are experienced. Other hidden fees include missed deadlines, lower morale, organizational knowledge loss, and clients’ negative perception of the company image. Employee retention ensures low turnover is experienced in the company since employees’ values are essential and not easily replicated.
Research Sampling Design
The future research will use an individual questionnaire to get core information from the aimed sample, which entails chosen firms in America. The concept will include interviewing other company workers to get detailed personal data. In this respect, respondents will contribute to the research by answering the survey questions voluntarily. The concept of using a written survey will be ideal for this research because it allows respondents to fast themselves freely (Adams, Raeside & Khan,2014). In addition, the study will also accept qualitative information via interviewing selected company’s human resource officers to acknowledge the ideal state of recruitment and selection exercises and the retention levels. Comment by noir puma: This sounds very non-specific. Is there a way to “zoom in” on the population? Aim to respond to the assignment while discussing details like these.
The questionnaire will be organized to enable information collection at the grounds of the selected organizations using scientist-administered approaches. Likewise, the questions will be divided into varied sections and critical statements inputted in every one of these sections. Respondents will be needed to respond to these survey statements, which will direct the respondent’s reaction to the given choices. Because of the active list’s aim population, the surveys will be administered through a drop and pick later approach. In this respect, the system will help prevent intrusions levels in the companies during the study process.
Field Work Arrangement
It is critical to make arrangements before coordinating with the aimed manufacturing organization in America to brief them about the objective and goals of this research. The idea will allow these organizations to give investors critical data and records concerning worker recruitment and selection procedures and their retention states. Due to difficulties in reaching aimed population from the chosen companies, it will be critical to undertake an online study. It is thus essential to start getting ready for a survey monkey that will allow respondents to sign up ad fill in the questionnaire.
Statistics analysis and presentation following collecting of all wished records where all the questionnaires had been duly filled in and then lower back, the researcher will edit them for fulness and code them to make the essential entries into SPPS version 21. (van Heerden, Visagie & Wessels, 2016). This point of view will help improve the precision, consistency, and casual records as simplifies the tabularized and coded statistics. The introduction of information entry will allow the researcher to capture and maintain the edited facts. After taking and retaining edited records, the researcher will undertake inferential and descriptive documents. Descriptive statistics will consist of the usage of frequencies in their comparative and absolute manner in possibilities. At the same time, inferential records will assist explain the extent and nature of affiliation advanced among structured and independent variables using regression evaluation. Researchers use regression analysis to give inferences from the collected data to more general situations. The regression version will follow the formula underneath: Comment by noir puma: This sentence (and this area in general) does a good job of identifying specific details that could be part of a study. Are these the kinds of details the assignment is looking for? If so, I recommend putting these at the forefront – in the introduction. See Help Areas for thoughts about Focus and Organization.
Y = α + βzero + β1X1 + β2X2 + є
Y will symbolize employees’ retention α will represent beta coefficients X1 indicates the recruitment practices X2 reveals the selection exercising and ε = mistakes period.
Moral requirements consideration.
The study will goal to uphold a high fashionable of ethics inside the complete look at manner. one of the fundamental ethical aspects assumed with the aid of the researcher will entail searching for the authorization of the chosen manufacturing corporations earlier than carrying out their respective people. The studies will additionally base on uploading utmost honest via descriptive to the target’s respondent regarding the goals and objectives of the research and guarantee them the confidentiality of the information they’ll provide their anonymity fame. additionally, the studies avoid unprofessional misconducts like fabricating respondents’ records or plagiarizing facts to influence the research’s final results. Comment by noir puma: It’s not entirely clear what you’re trying to say here… Is there a way to introduce this paragraph in a way that tells the reader what “big idea” will come?
Proposed Timeline of Action and Resources Required
The central resources that investigators will require for this research will entail time, access to data, human resources, and software needed like the SPSS. Time is very instrumental in the study and thus must be planned very well. Additionally, human resources have a vital role due to help take out actual research while SPSS software helps the researcher in information analysis.
Conclusion
Additional issues such as reference checks, temporary worker costs, legal training expenses, relocation costs, and security clearance are experienced. Other hidden fees include missed deadlines, lower morale, organizational knowledge loss, and clients’ negative perception of the company image. Employee retention ensures low turnover is experienced in the company since employees’ values are essential and not easily replicated. Human resources management progressed to under a critical role in making sure that companies succeed and thrive well. In most matters, the company’s success is evaluated through aspects as achieving company objectives, invasion and retention of inspired and effective educated workers, and the capacity to use their capabilities and competence well. The company’s recruiting procedure gives the foundation for hiring. Recruitment includes the company decisions and exercises that impact the kind and number of individuals that apply for and eventually adopt the prevailing job opportunities. The company’s recruiting procedure gives the foundation for hiring. It serves as a core HRM exercise that assists the organization managers and the entire company in recruiting the required individuals and subsequently keeping them for the foreseeable future. Companies progressed to be affected by wrong recruitment and selection decisions that they can hardly keep their experienced workers, hindering performance and acquiring additional expenses. Comment by noir puma: A conclusion shouldn’t introduce “additional issues.” Comment by noir puma: And so this is what you want to “prove”? Or are you proposing ways to “study” these? Aim to clarify the purpose of the assignment – here and in the very beginning.
References
Asiedu-Appiah, F., Kontor, E., & Asamoah, D. (2013). Effect of human resource management practices on employee retention: perspectives from the mining industry in Ghana.
Adams, J, Raeside, R, & Khan, H 2014, Research Methods for Business and Social Science Students, New Delhi: Sage Publications Pvt. Ltd, viewed 13 June 2018.
ALDamoe, F. M. A., Yazam, M., & Ahmid, K. B. (2012). The mediating effect of HRM outcomes (employee retention) on the relationship between HRM practices and organizational performance. International Journal of Human Resource Studies, 2(1), 75.
Janjua, B. H., & Gulzar, A. (2014). The impact of human resource practices on employee commitment and employee retention in telecom sector of Pakistan: Exploring the mediating role of employee loyalty. IOSR Journal of Business and Management, 16(1), 76-81.
van Heerden, M, Visagie, R, & Wessels, J 2016, ‘A discipline-relevant conceptual framework for research ethics review in economic sciences’, Review Of Social Economy, 74, 1, pp. 33- 52, Business Source Complete.
Sheehan, C, De Cieri, H, Greenwood, M, & Van Buren, H 2014, ‘HR Professional Role Tensions: Perceptions and Responses of the Top Management Team’, Human Resource Management, 53, 1, pp. 115-130, Business Source Complete, EBSCOhost, viewed 13 June 2018.
Next Steps List:
First of all, before going through these steps, I think it will help to open a new blank document. But DON’T DELETE what you already have. Just open a new document to work with.
Writing some new thoughts before a revision can help find ways to interject the good stuff and leave out the less-helpful stuff. *I* like to open a new document and go through cut/paste steps as a way to find the right words. In your case, these steps should help while “filling in” the new draft:
1. Before changing any text or cutting/pasting into the new document, take a moment to write answers to each question from the prompt. Then, aim to use the language and keywords from those questions in your responses. (It looks like those are supposed to be put in bold in your text anyway.)
2. Organize those ideas into an outline representation of the overall flow of the piece. While doing this, think about the significance of the order in which you present your points. The outline from the assignment will be a big help here!
3. Using that outline for inspiration, I recommend returning to this draft. Look for the “big ideas” that you intend to prove in each paragraph. Cut/paste those thoughts into the new text – while staying with the argument. Ideas may move around – go ahead and let that happen!
4. While working with the new draft, be sure that every sentence with source-based information is explicitly connected to the source itself. Remember that in APA, every sentence associated with a source must include a citation. These resources should help you get started:
a. The Purdue OWL explains the process nicely here: https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/apa_style/apa_formatting_and_style_guide/in_text_citations_the_basics.html
b. From the PennState University Libraries: https://guides.libraries.psu.edu/apaquickguide/intext
c. From California State University’s Dominguez Hills University Library: https://libguides.csudh.edu/citation/apa-7