DESCRITPION
This is a rewrite (not from scratch) and I need it to read like a story with a defined beginning middle and end, preferably with a hypothesis and a conclusion. Adding the current article. I think it's decently written but still requires some work. This is for a magazine so needs to read like a strong opinion. References not necessary. And I would prefer if the length was maintained as much as possible.
2 SAMPLES ATTACHED
Attaching 2 articles from the same magazine so you get a sense of the kind of tone and language needed.