propose change help

I can tell that you edited your paper to align with a proposal that would improve outcomes. There remain some areas of the paper that need clarity to meet the requirements. You did show great improvement from the first attempt!

COMPETENCY 1

Identify the challenges and opportunities facing health care.

CRITERION

Identify an aspect of a local or regional health care system or program that should be a focus for change.

Distinguished

Identifies an aspect of a local or regional health care system or program that should be a focus for change. Provides clear expectations for improvements substantiated by credible evidence.

Faculty Comments:

The paper starts by explaining the need for telemonitoring technologies to improve hypertension. To improve to proficiency level, identify a local or regional health care system or program that should be the focus of change such as a local community you are familiar with. Along with providing a rationale for the chosen community with the proposed change. For further information, see directions within Assessment 1.

COMPETENCY 2

Compare the effects of different health care finance models and policy frameworks on resources and patient outcomes.

CRITERION

Define desirable outcomes, including who will pay for care and factors limiting the achievement of those outcomes.

Distinguished

Defines desirable outcomes, including who will pay for care and factors limiting achievement of those outcomes. Provides well-reasoned justification for the definition and exhibits insight into optimal health care solutions.

Faculty Comments:

The paper discusses further the issues that arise with hypertension. The services that are being proposed would be from the organization and insurance coverage. Limitation includes a lack of self-motivation by the patient. To improve to proficiency level, clearly discuss the desired outcomes of the proposal and include at least one more limitation. For example, what outcomes would you hope to see with the implementation of telemonitoring? 

COMPETENCY 3

Evaluate the positive and negative influences of leaders on health care processes and outcomes.

CRITERION

Determine the financial and health implications of making and not making proposed changes to a health care system or program.

Distinguished

Determines the financial and health implications of making and not making proposed changes to a health care system or program. Draws insightful, well-reasoned conclusions based on credible evidence.

Faculty Comments:

The paper noted how the use of telehealth could create better outcomes. The paper notes that the costs of HTN and its management are large and addresses what could happen if action is taken with no action. To improve proficiency level, address what health implications of making the proposed changes could occur with the local health system and not making the proposed changes.

COMPETENCY 4

Develop proactive strategies to change the culture of the organization by incorporating evidence-based practices.

CRITERION

Explain why specific changes will lead to improved outcomes.

Distinguished

Explains why specific changes will lead to improved outcomes. Draws well-substantiated conclusions that are in line with reasonable expectations.

Faculty Comments:

The paper addresses the importance of continued efforts to support HTN because of its prevalence. To improve to proficient level, address why the desired outcomes provided in criteria 3 will be met through the proposal of telemonitoring. Be specific with reflecting on desired outcomes and why the proposal will help.