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Technological Impacts on Education

Introduction

In the present era of high-end epoch technology, school-going children and their

educators incorporate technology in teaching-learning activities. Students at home are seen

trying to complete their assignments given to them by their educators through internet searches.

Thanks to the development of highly efficient electronic devices and Wi-Fi connections in most

households, . tThe students can be able to beat deadlines and attract high scores in grading. The

teaching-learning activities ought to proceed, whether the learners properly use the available

technologies or not.

Nonetheless, the learning media has been significant in enhancing students' mastery of

content and high academic and professional achievements. On the other end, the rapid

developments of social media infrastructures and advancements in education systems have

presented numerous obstacles. The school-going children get deprived of enough sleeping hours,

feel isolated, and often result in bad body posture and neck pain. These negative impacts of

technology are undeniable. Therefore, the education managers, planners, policymakers, and other

stakeholders should limit electronic devices among learners such as laptops and smartphones to

ensure that the body's normal biological functions are not altered and ensure that technology

offers feasible teaching-learning opportunities activities.

Argumentations

The use of technology alters the standard sleeping patterns of the students. Many

students often may spend many hours watching mindless amusements and other funny videos,

Comment [PMW2]: The thesis and the argument that you are presenting are unclear. Are you arguing for or against technology? New ways of teaching? Are you arguing against online/distance learning? The thesis should clearly state a debatable topic and then state which side of the argument that your paper will be defending.

Comment [PMW3]: How so? This is unclear.

Comment [PMW4]: Is this the thesis? Electronics should be limited?

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losing focus on their academics. Excessive use of technology automatically deprives them of

their regular sleeping hours. Therefore, the students will be unable to concentrate during their

normal teaching-learning activities in their schools. When these habits are regularly engaged, the

effects on their academic scores become even worse. The production of melatonin gets altered

when the students overuse electronic devices at night. As a result, these learners get deprived of

good sleep during the nights (Barber & Cucalon, 2017).

Our minds often get distracted, where numerous notifications and messages are coming

into our devices. It may seem like simple conversation, but may result in fatal road accidents

when driving while having these gadgets in their hands. A significant number of students found

scrolling and texting with their peers while engaging in literature searches to handling their

assignments. They lose their academic focus, and this will translate to poor academic

performance in schools. Online learning has provided opportunities for cheating (students

recycle assignments), students' assignments may get lost, good handwriting gets extinct, and time

wastage. Wrong information available or shared online may misguide the student, huge

expenditure in procuring electronic devices and data subscriptions, and limits the teaching-

learning methods since learning modules are installed online.

The students' writing and academic competencies deteriorate when they rely on

technological tools in their learning course. The students' three uncontested skills that they are

more likely to lose are; arithmetic, writing, and reading skills. When students learn by typing on

computers, tablets, and smartphones this impairs their reading and handwriting. Notably, the

students acquire practical learning through magazines and printed books than Google books

Comment [PMW5]: Okay, here the argument is becoming clearer to me. This is a good paragraph. I think that the introduction should be shorter, and that the thesis/argument should be presented in a more direct way.

Comment [PMW6]: This changes the focus and to continue supporting the argument you should keep the focus on students.

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(Alhumaid, 2019). Technology makes learners' minds shallow, and students with substantial

memory and understanding are those who read from the linear texts.

Increased information has been taught in a considerably shorter time while students

actively interact with electronic devices rather than the teacher. It deprives the close relationship

between the educator and his/her students. Sometimes the students complete their education

programs without any physical interaction—these dehumanizing impacts of online learning tune

the students out of the natural world (Alhumaid, 2019). Education's technological implications

have dramatically hampered the educator's and students' rapport, challenging effective

communication between them.

Besides having students "wired" to electronic devices depriving the students and teachers

of social connections, they begin to use technological devices to gain security and safety. This

phenomenon was witnessed among 13 UK universities with approximately 1500 Masters'

students undertaking these programs online forums (Carter et al., 2019). Despite rigorous online

support offered by these universities by the host universities, the students gradually develop a

sense of loneliness since they can’t access other students physically. Such isolations have led to

dehumanizing effects whereby the student highly depend on technology for learning and tend to

neglect the human relations the educators presenting the teaching-learning activities online get

deprived of superior social skills. Isolation is more prevalent among children at their tender age

globally, who attend schools when machine learning gets highly developed. The overuse of

gadgets such as tablets, computers, and tablet lead to low academic scores and enhances the

students' isolation (Carter et al., 2019). From this review, loneliness and isolation are the

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repercussions of inappropriate use of technology among learners, and as a result, they often

forget about their classmates.

Conclusively, results indicate that school-going children are negatively affected by

technological use in teaching and learning activities. Impairment of students' handwriting,

deterioration of the uncontested skills, dehumanizing impacts of technology, loneliness and

isolation, poor academic scores, poor postures, and sleeping habits are primarily caused by the

misuse of technology among school-going children. The learners' and students' rapport should

be adequately developed for the whole development of the student. If the students are misusing

technology and deprive them of their fundamental skills such as good handwriting, reading, and

arithmetic skills, their prospective professional targets would significantly impede. Why, then,

the school managers, policymakers, and stakeholders resist regulating technology use among the

students and teachers?

Body paragraph 8- counterarguments and disproves

Whereas the misuse of technology among the learners, incorporating technology to

enhance teaching has been considered pervasive. Technological gadgets and social media

platforms are rapidly developing globally. Despite the negative impacts, technology in

education has offered enough opportunities to teach, and students learn and access a global

variety of knowledge (Chen et al., 2020). While the various governments and researchers

promote technology in learning, why don't the schools ensure that technological 'harm' gets

limited by advising them to devise interactive content for course enrichment? Technology has

been primarily responsible for provoking isolation and loneliness.

Comment [PMW10]: . This essay is very confusing and difficult to follow. Many of the sentences feel as if they were cut-and-pasted into the work and the wording is all over the place. There are many incomplete and confusing sentences, too. I am returning the essay to you for revisions to clarify the writing and the flow. If you need to, go back and revisit the lessons on Touchstone 5 or check out this link to help you to focus and clarify the essay: https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/general_writing/academi c_writing/essay_writing/argumentative_essays.html Please make the revisions and resubmit the essay for grading.

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6 On the other hand, the students can learn globally through media platforms such as

YouTube and Facebook. However, research findings have indicated that the rapid development

of technology can help students when guided on how they can structure online activities that can

adequately enhance collaboration and communication. Better academic scores would be attained

by these learners when there is an appropriate use of technology.

Students' and educators' technological use in the teaching-learning activities should never

be abandoned because of deteriorating the student-teacher rapport. The students can complete

their assignments before deadlines by supplementing the online data searches with the lecture

notes. School educators should actively encourage their learners to interact with each other,

share and compare classroom projects and blog posts, and monitor how students interact with

each other globally. Learning with technology would be indispensable such that the learner and

the educator can effectively achieve class aims and objectives if adequately utilized by the

education key players.

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References

Alhumaid, K. (2019). Four Ways Technology Has Negatively Changed Education. Journal of

Educational and Social Research, 9(4), 10-10.

Barber, L. K., & Cucalon, M. S. (2017). Modifying the Sleep Treatment Education Program for

Students to include technology use (STEPS‐TECH): Intervention effects on objective and

subjective sleep outcomes. Stress and Health, 33(5), 684-690.

Carter, J., Appel, O., Salomoni, M., Vourgidis, I., & Chiclana, F. (2019). Supervision of

Postgraduate Independent Study in a Distance Learning Environment Transnational

Higher Education in Computing Courses (pp. 73-85): Springer.

Chen, J. C., Dobinson, T., & Kent, S. (2020). Students' Perspectives on the Impact of Blackboard

Collaborate on Open University Australia (OUA) Online Learning. Journal of Educators

Online, 17(1), n1.

Think about your writing

1. What have you learned about how to present a strong argument? How could/will you apply this knowledge in your professional or everyday life (3-4 sentences)?

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8 From this argumentative essay, I have learned that presenting strong arguments requires

that only factual information is gathered. Helpful resources search as online search (Google

scholar, research articles, and e-books) are fundamental in ensuring that every argument

presented is supported effectively. I also learned that other than presenting argumentative

statements, it is also essential to discuss the counterarguments to make a comparative study of

technology's pros and cons in learning. Notably, the skills that I have learned will be applicable

in real-life situations characterized by heterogeneity in socio-cultural and economic values.

Various people have varied opinions and arguments in different contexts. Constructive

arguments devoid of bias and dishonest will ensure that every other person’s opinion is important

and deserve to be heard.

2. Consider the English Composition I course as a whole. What have you learned

about yourself as a writer (5-6 sentences)?

Composition writing is a skill that demands proper organization of thoughts. In writing

this argumentative essay, I learned that a lack of good thoughts could be an obstacle in academic

writing. Making significant revisions in sentence structures and checking the organization of

thoughts rigorously is fundamental in improving the write-up's quality and form. In this work, I

learned that writing effectively and efficiently is a challenging task that demands attention and

when the mind is in sobriety. Writing grammatically correct sentences is relatively easy, but

linking these sentences from the introductory part to the conclusion part is tricky. The

appropriate selection of the topic and the concluding remarks ensured that the work remained in

scope. After writing this work, I have learned that I am gradually becoming a good writer-with

the experience I have gained over time.

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