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Modification Comments： I'd like to see more engagement with a more specific issue in the game. I have outlined one for you that came to my mind as I read of your experience in the game. It is very interesting that you uncovered a way that the game seems to incentivize kinds fo immoral action. Say more! Much of your draft is a lot of description of events in the game that do not hang together on a structure just yet, but if you narrow your focus to one thing, you'll be in a better position to redescribe elements of the game by how they relate to your question.
The game must be: this war of mine
Your paper must have a point. Talk about something that’s interesting. If you can’t say why someone should care to read your paper, you’re in trouble.
“ Say something interesting” is not exactly an objective measure. But, there are a few heuristics you can use to see if you’re on a good track with your idea for your paper:
1. Are you interested in what you want to write about. If you’re not, odds are that no one else will be. Find something that you’re interested in writing about!
2. Talk to other people about your idea – are they interested in it? If they are, that’s a good sign.
3. Have other people written about what you’ll be writing about? If they have, that’s a bad sign – your idea is less interesting because it’s been “done”.
4. Talk to me (the instructor) about your idea.
5. Finally, can you tell me what the point of your paper is? What are you trying to argue for? If you can’t say this – you need to work on your idea more!
In order to make your point you need to provide detailed examples that support it. You should not describe the entire game and all of its features, only those things that are relevant to your point and that provide enough context for the reader to understand the point you’re trying to make. If your examples are factually incorrect, you will get an “F”!
The paper should probably have these 4 sections:
1. Introduction (briefly identify and describe the game you’re analyzing)
2. Describe your argument. For example:
1. What is the moral issue you will discuss/analyze in the game?
2. What moral question or issue are the game creators raising? What are they trying to express through the game they’ve made?
3. Why is the thing you will talk about interesting?
3. Support your argument
1. Provide evidence (examples) and reasoning (logic) that supports your argument!
4. Conclusion (restate your argument)
Submission process:
1. First, you need to submit a “Draft” version of your paper (see canvas for dates).
2. You’ll get feedback/comments on your draft.
3. Make changes and corrections to your paper.
4. Submit your final paper.
Recommendations
· I have provided sample papers for you to read. Read them!
· You will most likely discover while you are writing that there are additional details about the game that you need to cover. Leave yourself enough time to go back and forth between drafting your paper and playing the game.
· Focus on those details of the game that are relevant for the point you’re trying to make. You should not attempt to catalog everything. Only introduce elements that are important for your analysis. Conversely, each element that you use in making your argument must receive an adequately detailed description in the paper.
· When in doubt, for a specific example, be more specific.
· One example is not enough.
· Plan ahead. You’ll need time to adequately explore and play the game.
· Use the template in the Files section.
Things that are RARELY Interesting in Past Student Papers
· This game is unethical because something unethical happens in the game.
· This unethical thing happens/appears in the game and it is interesting just because.
· This game has an ethical system. This is interesting.
· Is there anything interesting/different/special/unusual about the ethical system? Talking about THAT could be interesting.
· This game has a tough choice, but the tough choice doesn’t have anything to do with ethics/morality.
· I’m going to write a review of this game and tell you why it’s good/bad.