ENG1200-wk2

Hello student,

This is a good start! If you attach your paper next time, I can insert comments and give you more specific corrections/ suggestions.

Be sure to discuss specific examples of how Appiah uses logical and emotional appeals. For logical appeals, look for places where he cites statistics, numbers, facts, etc. to support his claims. For emotional appeals, look for places where the terms and language he uses would get a strong reaction of disgust from most people or some other emotion..

Also, I think what would help overall is to structure your essay according to the guidelines, where par. 1 introduces the topic and states your thesis clearly (right now your thesis isn't totally clear); par. 2 summarizes the main points of the essay; par 3 discusses logical appeals; par 4 discussed emotional appeals; and par. 5 concludes by wrapping up your analysis of whether his rhetorical strategies were effective for you as a reader.

Here is a sample thesis, that might reflect how you feel about the essay:

Appiah's essay about unethical and inhumane practice in society was convincing to me because of his use use of primarily emotional appeals, along with some logical appeals. He made strong arguments for why the four practices he discussed will be judged as wrong by future generations.

Start with a sentence that clearly introduces the topic and summarizes what Appiah’s article is about. Ex: Appiah’s essay, “How the Future Will Judge Us” argues that there have always been inhumane and unethical practices in society that later generations would come to see as obviously wrong and condemn. He gives examples of these past practices that we now see as barbaric: [list examples] .In America today, there are still practices which are accepted now but which will be seen at unethical and inhumane in the future, he argues. His essay discusses four of these in particular. [State thesis:] I found his argument overall convincing, through his use of emotional and logical appeals throughout the essay.

Example of an emotional appeal:

Appiah states that “nearly 2 million of America’s elderly are warehoused in nursing homes, out of sight, and to some extent, out of mind” (Appiah, p. 512). Look at the language here—he uses the verb “warehoused”—not a term normally used for humans. It’s an emotional appeal, an appeal to pathos. It creates a sense of outrage in the reader almost.

Appiah stated that “In 2003, in France 14,000 elderly parents and grandparents were left to perish in the stifling temperatures.” (page 513, para. 15 ). Again, this is a great example of an emotional appeal—He contrasts elderly people dying while families are having their summer vacations.

Logical appeal:

Appiah gives three signs that a practice is destined for future condemnation. The three signs are people have already heard the arguments against the practice, defenders of the practice do not offer moral counterarguments, and supporters engage in strategic ignorance when dealing with unpleasant truths.

I hope this helps,