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Who is 'they'?

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Good Intro - Definition & Description

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Good discussion on extent of problem.

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1 Good discussion on agent.

According to whom? Citation needed at beginning & end

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1 Citation needed at beginning & end

Avoid generalizations Citation needed at beginning & end

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Evidence-based research needed here.

Avoid generalizations Citation needed at beginning & end

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What is 'this'?

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Who is 'they'?

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Good discussion on the levels of prevention.

Use the term, "who." Evidence-based research needed here.

Evidence-based research needed here.

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Evidence-based research needed here.

Evidence-based research needed here. Evidence-based research needed here.

Avoid generalizations Avoid generalizations

Evidence-based research needed here.

APA citation needed

Avoid generalizations

Evidence-based research needed here.

Elaborate on environmental factors.

Possessive

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Adequate discussion on hypothesis

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Confused

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Proper Nouns

Good discussion on Gaps in Knowledge.

Great appendices.

Missing: Suggestions for further research

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Article Error You may need to use an article before this word. Consider using the article the.

APA citation needed

An APA citation is needed here.

Please visit https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/apa_style/apa_formatting_and_style_g

APA citation needed

An APA citation is needed here.

Please visit https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/apa_style/apa_formatting_and_style_g

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APA citation needed

An APA citation is needed here.

Please visit https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/apa_style/apa_formatting_and_style_g

S/V This subject and verb may not agree. Proofread the sentence to make sure the subject agrees with the verb.

APA citation needed

An APA citation is needed here.

Please visit https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/apa_style/apa_formatting_and_style_g

Who is 'they'?

Be more descriptive. What is 'they'?

Sp. This word is misspelled. Use a dictionary or spellchecker when you proofread your work.

Good Intro - Definition & Description

Good introduction - definition and description.

Article Error You may need to use an article before this word.

APA citation needed

An APA citation is needed here.

Please visit https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/apa_style/apa_formatting_and_style_g

Wrong Form You may have used the wrong form of this word.

Sp. Spelling error

Sp. This word is misspelled. Use a dictionary or spellchecker when you proofread your work.

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Article Error You may need to remove this article.

Good discussion on extent of problem.

Good discussion on extent of the problem.

Article Error You may need to remove this article.

Missing "," Review the rules for using punctuation marks.

Article Error You may need to use an article before this word.

P/V You have used the passive voice in this sentence. You may want to revise it using the active voice.

Comment 1

AIDS is incurable, but there is treatment available (e.g., Anti-retroviral therapy).

Good discussion on agent.

Good discussion on agent of disease.

According to whom?

According to whom? An APA citation is needed here. This information is not considered common knowledge, therefore, the source(s) of this information needs to be cited. Otherwise, this is considered an opinion without evidence and/or plagiarism because credit was not given to those who provided this information.

See https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/560/03/

P/V You have used the passive voice in this sentence. You may want to revise it using the active voice.

Citation needed at beginning & end

The author’s name and publication year need to be cited at the beginning of where the information is introduced and cited again at the end where the information ends.

P/V You have used the passive voice in this sentence. You may want to revise it using the active voice.

Sp. This word is misspelled. Use a dictionary or spellchecker when you proofread your work.

Article Error You may need to remove this article.

According to whom?

See https://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/560/03/

Citation needed at beginning & end

The author’s name and publication year need to be cited at the beginning of where the information is introduced and cited again at the end where the information ends.

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Avoid generalizations

Avoid generalizations. Support your statements with evidence-based data.

Citation needed at beginning & end

The author’s name and publication year need to be cited at the beginning of where the information is introduced and cited again at the end where the information ends.

S/V This subject and verb may not agree. Proofread the sentence to make sure the subject agrees with the verb.

Evidence-based research needed here.

Avoid generalizations

Avoid generalizations. Support your statements with evidence-based data.

Citation needed at beginning & end

The author’s name and publication year need to be cited at the beginning of where the information is introduced and cited again at the end where the information ends.

Missing "," Review the rules for using punctuation marks.

What is 'this'?

Article Error You may need to use an article before this word. Consider using the article the.

Missing "," Review the rules for using punctuation marks.

Who is 'they'?

Who is 'they'? Use more descriptive words.

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Article Error You may need to remove this article.

Comment 2

There is anti-retroviral therapy (treatment).

Article Error You may need to remove this article.

Missing "," Review the rules for using punctuation marks.

Sp. This word is misspelled. Use a dictionary or spellchecker when you proofread your work.

Good discussion on the levels of prevention.

Good job discussing the different levels of prevention.

Use the term, "who."

Use the term, "who" as it refers to a person. Using the term, "that" refers to an object or animal.

Evidence-based research needed here.

Missing "," Review the rules for using punctuation marks.

Evidence-based research needed here.

Avoid generalizations

Avoid generalizations. Support your statements with evidence-based data.

Avoid generalizations

Avoid generalizations. Support your statements with evidence-based data.

Evidence-based research needed here.

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APA citation needed

An APA citation is needed here.

Please visit https://owl.purdue.edu/owl/research_and_citation/apa_style/apa_formatting_and_style_g

Avoid generalizations

Avoid generalizations. Support your statements with evidence-based data.

Evidence-based research needed here.

Elaborate on environmental factors.

Possessive

Comment 3

This doesn't accurately describe temporal variation.

Article Error You may need to remove this article.

Adequate discussion on hypothesis

Adequate discussion on hypothesis.

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Prep. You may be using the wrong preposition.

Frag. This sentence may be a fragment or may have incorrect punctuation. Proofread the sentence to be sure that it has correct punctuation and that it has an independent clause with a complete subject and predicate.

Confused You have used either an imprecise word or an incorrect word.

Prep. You may be using the wrong preposition.

Proper Nouns You may need to use a capital letter for this proper noun.

Good discussion on Gaps in Knowledge.

Good discussion on gaps in knowledge.

Great appendices.

Great information in the appendices.

Missing: Suggestions for further research

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