Need Eng Writing Assistance
HandfordRoughDraft by Kimberley Handford
Submission date: 07-May-2023 03:36PM (UTC-0400) Submission ID: 2086667216 File name: 130602_Kimberley_Handford_HandfordRoughDraft_6035532_812290138.docx (18.92K) Word count: 706 Character count: 4318
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20% SIMILARITY INDEX
17% INTERNET SOURCES
7% PUBLICATIONS
20% STUDENT PAPERS
1 5%
2 4%
3 4%
4 3%
5 3%
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HandfordRoughDraft ORIGINALITY REPORT
PRIMARY SOURCES
egrove.olemiss.edu Internet Source
Submitted to University of Teesside Student Paper
www.theibfr.com Internet Source
files.osf.io Internet Source
Submitted to Kaplan College Student Paper
FINAL GRADE
80/100
HandfordRoughDraft GRADEMARK REPORT
GENERAL COMMENTS
Instructor
Kimberley, thank you for submitting the Week 6 Research Paper Rough Draft. Please review my comment markups within your paper for information that should help you as you work on your final essay. Thanks for your work on this! Professor Gonzalez
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Comment 1
Only two paragraphs were required for this activity (an introduction and the first body paragraph), so those are the only things being evaluated for this assignment.
Comment 2
Though your topic is clear, you don't quite have a proper thesis statement in place. The thesis should be the last sentence of the introductory paragraph, and it should present a specific argument related to your subject matter. Once you have this in place, you'll need to make sure that all body paragraphs are written to support it. Remember that a thesis cannot be a question, a quote (or other source material), or a simple statement of fact. It must be a strong, declarative statement in which you put forth an argument pertaining to your subject matter.
You should use source information within the body of your paper to support your thesis argument. You shouldn't need to cite your thesis because it should be your own creation.
Comment 3
You'll want to make adjustments to the body of your work once you have revised your thesis statement. All body paragraphs should be written to provide support for your thesis argument. Make sure each body paragraph begins with a strong topic sentence that directly connects to your thesis.
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Comment 4
As a rule, avoid ending paragraphs with cited information. Remember that you need to discuss, in your own words, all source information used.
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Comment 5
Make sure you completely follow MLA guidelines for citation development. Because we are working remotely, you need to include a link for every resource used.
RUBRIC: RESEARCH PAPER ENG101
THESIS (20%)
ABOVE STANDARDS (20)
MEETS STANDARDS (15)
APPROACHING STANDARDS (10)
BELOW STANDARDS (0)
THINKING (20%)
ABOVE STANDARDS (20)
MEETS STANDARDS (15)
APPROACHING STANDARDS (10)
BELOW STANDARDS (0)
REASONING (20%)
ABOVE STANDARDS (20)
MEETS STANDARDS (15)
APPROACHING STANDARDS (10)
BELOW STANDARDS (0)
13.50 / 20
10 / 20
Thesis and Organization
The writer provides a clear and thoughtful thesis that states the purpose or argument of the paper. Additionally, the paper is organized in an effective manner.
The writer provides a thesis that states the purpose or argument of the paper. The paper is organized in an effective manner.
The writer has a clear main idea, but the thesis is not clearly articulated, or the paper is not effectively organized.
The writer has not produced a thesis that clearly or accurately states the purpose or argument of the paper and/or the paper is not organized.
15 / 20
Significance and Original Thinking
The main idea of the paper is interesting, important and original; the paper contributes to the conversation on literature's role in American culture. The content is not a summary of the ideas of others.
The main idea of the paper is interesting and important; the paper contributes to the conversation on literature's role in American culture. The content is not a summary of the ideas of others.
The main idea of the paper is somewhat interesting or important, but the paper doesn't really contribute to the conversation on literature's role in American culture. Too much of the content is a summary of the ideas of others.
The paper does not demonstrate original thinking, and the ideas of the paper are not interesting or important to the conversation of literature's role in American culture. The content is a summary of the ideas of others.
15 / 20
The essay features a logical progression of sophisticated ideas that support the focus of the paper.
The essay features a logical progression of ideas that support the focus of the paper.
The essay features applicable ideas, but they don't necessarily support the focus of the paper.
The essay does not employ a logical progression of ideas, but seems instead to be a "stream of consciousness" or an "information dump."
DETAILS (15%)
ABOVE STANDARDS (20)
MEETS STANDARDS (15)
APPROACHING STANDARDS (10)
BELOW STANDARDS (0)
COMPREHENSION (15%)
ABOVE STANDARDS (20)
MEETS STANDARDS (15)
APPROACHING STANDARDS (10)
BELOW STANDARDS (0)
CITATIONS (10%)
ABOVE STANDARDS (20)
MEETS STANDARDS (15)
APPROACHING STANDARDS (10)
BELOW STANDARDS (0)
15 / 20
Details and textual evidence
The author has used a sufficient number of specific details that effectively and interestingly prove the thesis of the paper.
The author has used a sufficient number of specific details that prove the thesis of the paper.
The author's details are not sufficient or specific enough to be particularly effective.
The author has not used details to effectively prove the thesis of the essay.
15 / 20
Comprehensibility
All sentences are clear and understandable; the author employs vocabulary, grammar and mechanics that are nearly, if not, perfect. Sentence variety and clarity make the paper an enjoyable read.
All sentences are clear and understandable; the author employs vocabulary, grammar and mechanics that clearly indicate college-level understanding and execution of Standard English.
Most sentences are clear and understandable; the author sometimes employs vocabulary, grammar and mechanics that do not demonstrate college-level writing ability.
The writer does not employ college level writing.
10 / 20
All quotations, paraphrases and summaries are correctly cited using perfect MLA citing format.
All quotations, paraphrases and summaries are cited using MLA citing format, but there are a few tiny errors.
All quotations, paraphrases and summaries are cited, but not using MLA citing format.
All citations are either non- existent or incorrect.