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The reflective essay took an emotional appeal. I can sense both sympathy and empathy in certain parts of it. I think at some point or another we have all swallowed our pride and moved forward. The purpose or goal of the essay was to explain what the writer overcame during the current term to help him get better. What seem to be a good direction is explaining something that you have overcome this semester during the course. What you took from this was more than an academic challenge, it was the beginning of a personal growth. My overall impression of what you have as your draft is good job, stay on focus with this. The aspects you have touched on with your writing has been ethos, pathos, and kairo. Although you limited help from others, it was time you moved away from that. I would incorporate more about class and maybe throughout your understanding the first few weeks before asking for help. What led you to finally opening up. Give a few examples in your intro of pride in your academics before this that went well and others that didn’t. I’ve read your assignments assignment last week and this has a stronger feel to it. I would highly recommend that each paragraph you ask yourself why? Then from that answer within you expand on it and tie it in with academics.

To be more reflective in your essay I would go back to what was your reasoning for not asking for help in the past, when did you know it was time to let that go, and how will this help you academically from now on.

Yes, the essay is easy to follow I would advise not go off focus here, I could see how that could happen in an assignment where you are talking about something personal such as this.

Ask yourself why and what I recently learned myself is the so what and now what structuring.

Good luck!