proposal letter

Here are some comments in regard to your paper, please review and edit before submitting final draft. (also pay attention to your colleagues comments)

-Introduction paragraph needs more development

-Please remove the spaces in between your numbers and the percent symbol in your Issue paragraph. Also, it is not clear where you got these statistics from because there is no citation. Which survey are you talking about? If it is the one in your reference list, please use an in-text citation.

-The Boyd-Barrett in-text citation for your research finding is not listed on your reference list

-There is no specific action mentioned in the Call to Action paragraph. How do you want the mayor to show influence/impact?