Revision Strategy

Revision Strategy A revising statement based on the RISE model: In reviewing my peer review and suggestions of the instructor, here are the steps I plan to make in revising my work:

1. I have a good thesis, but it could be rewritten to make it more persuasive. 2. Overall, my claims seem to support my thesis. My third point could use more

development, perhaps through stronger logos and research. 3. My organization seems strong; however, on the fourth page I start to repeat an earlier

point. I’ll integrate that paragraph into the earlier point. 4. I have some issues with MLA citation, especially with direct quotation, that I need to

revise. 5. I have some issues with comma use and using uppercase to indicate a proper noun.