Critical Analysis of a Film Review
Attanayaka Fernando Essay 2 Draft .docx by Attanayaka Fernando
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You don't need to bold your title here
P/V Passive voice: Passive voice constructions do not tell your reader as much as the corresponding active version would. For instance, in the phrase "it is understood," a reader cannot know who or what is doing the understanding. A more active version requires that you tell your reader who is performing the action: "Students understand." While there are rare occasions when a writer cannot avoid the passive voice, the more informative active version is almost always a better choice. Changing passive constructions to active always makes writing more lively and accessible.
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put words in quotes when referring to them as words themselves
P/V Passive voice: Passive voice constructions do not tell your reader as much as the corresponding active version would. For instance, in the phrase "it is understood," a reader cannot know who or what is doing the understanding. A more active version requires that you tell your reader who is performing the action: "Students understand." While there are rare occasions when a writer cannot avoid the passive voice, the more informative active version is almost always a better choice. Changing passive constructions to active always makes writing more lively and accessible.
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MLA cites location in source (page numbers), not years like APA
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numerous other sorts of tropes exist than the four you mention to determine genre such as cinematography techniques, type of musical scoring, sound design, lighting, editing, etc.
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The setting is where the plot takes place, not where it was filmed. Movies set on alien planets aren't actually filmed on alien planets, for example.
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What/where exactly is your thesis/overall argument?
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P/V Passive voice: Passive voice constructions do not tell your reader as much as the corresponding active version would. For instance, in the phrase "it is understood," a reader cannot know who or what is doing the understanding. A more active version requires that you tell your reader who is performing the action: "Students understand." While there are rare occasions when a writer cannot avoid the passive voice, the more informative active version is almost always a better choice. Changing passive constructions to active always makes writing more lively and accessible.
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The biggest reasons genres change is because of societal changes. The fact that we don't get as many Westerns today than in the 1950s has nothing to do with the quality of the cameras.
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there are way more than four
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I still have no idea what your actual argument about this specific film is.
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how does any of this help to advance a specific argument?
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okay, got that from the intro--what exactly is your argument about how the film uses this genre?
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it isn't a movie.
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stay in 3rd person exclusively in formal academic writing. These essays are not about you, but about what readers can learn about a film.
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so is your main point here that it strays away from the medical genre trope of lighting is used? To what purpose does it do this? Discuss specific examples and use images (screenshots from the film itself) in your essay to illustrate your claims.
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You lost me here. Numerous excellent films have flashbacks. Numerous excellent films do not. It is simply a narrative technique.
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