Hist Research Paper

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ASSIGNMANTCORRECTIONSinTHREE.docx

ASSIGNMANT CORRECTIONS in THREE (3) SECTIONS, NEED Attention DONEHM

Mock Thesis Corrections List

We read over your thesis and found it really very interesting!  Note issues of citation. Some citations as noted in your Works Cited are absent within the paper AND citations throughout the paper NOT appearing in the Works Cited. A considerable number of references in your thesis don’t appear in your list of Works Cited. 

SECTION 1. These are the references with the pages within your thesis project where a citation was noted, but DO NOT appear on the Works Cited page: ( ADD)

Alogaili, page 34

Penelope Gilliatt, page 2 in paper

John Lahr, page 3

Monague, Valerie, page 4, 58, 59

Postalwait, page 4

Oscar Wilde, page 8

John Mill, page 14

Broadberry/Harrison, page 10

Burgess, pages 20-24

Great Depression and WWII Teacher Resources, pages 20 and on

Fishback/Jaworski, page 22

Campbell/Weatherford, page 25

Stock Market Crash, page 25

Billington 31

Astra North, page 62

 

SECTION 2. These are the works cited noted on the Works Cited page that DO NOT appear in the paper that I can see: REMOVE

 

Ackerman

Banerjee

Ditmore

Graham

Greenblatt

Saville-Troike

Esslin

Pack

Smith

Herman

 

I don’t know which Pinker is noted for which reference in the paper (there are two Pinkers in the Works Cited).

 

SECTION 3. There are areas where citations are needed:

Victorian section, pages 7-8

Discussion of Wilde’s play, pages 9-12

Thomas Hardy discussion on page 12

Emily Bronte discussion on page 13

John Mill discussion on page 14

Whole section on Victorian society

Cites Encyclopedia Britannica and no reference is noted in Works Cited.