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Introduction

Opening: The upper class can be defined in many ways, not only as wealth，also excellent manners. Comment by Michael Ng: Should be in keywords, why is this italicized?

Background:

· George Cleaver

Have parties

Has a conflict with Tibbs because of wine types and vinegar

· Tibbs

Introduce different wine types

Has a conflict with Tibbs because of wine and vinegar

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Thesis: The author perfectly shows that the difference between two characters with classes, habits and conflicts. Comment by Michael Ng: The theme in this statement is not a theme.

Body Paragraph 1 (Classes)

Topic Sentence: The story describes the two different classes at the beginning.

Explanation:

· Mrs. Cleavermiddle class --made a lot of money--try to climb the social ladder

· Tibbsupper class-- high social status

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Evidence:

· “he and Mrs. Cleaver moved out of their small suburban villa into an elegant London house. They acquired a French chef called Monsieur Estragon and an English butler called Tibbs, both wildly expensive.” (Dahl)

Explanation:

Lafite ’45—good taste-- upper class

Spanish red/Vinegar—middle class

Evidence:

· “Well, sir, Monsieur Estragon serves superb food. Superb food should be accompanied by superb wine. But you serve them a cheap and very odious Spanish red.” (Dahl)

Concluding/Transition Sentence:

· Different classes sets up conflict

Body Paragraph 2 (Habits)

Topic Sentence:

There are many ways to distinguish between different classes. The author uses Vinegar and makes readers know that Mrs. Cleaver is ignorant of wine culture.

Explanation:

· Tibbs pure olive oil and a little lemon juice

· Mr. Cleaver quantities of vinegar

· Different dietary habitdifferent life-style

Evidence:

· “I believe, sir, that you have instructed Monsieur Estragon to put liberal quantities of vinegar in the salad-dressing.” (Dahl)

· “The dressing should be made of pure olive oil and a little lemon juice. Nothing else.” (Dahl)

Concluding/Transition Sentence:

· Two tastestwo classes

· Different habits conflict

Body Paragraph 3 (Conflict)

Topic Sentence:

Due to Mr. Cleaver’s misunderstanding of wine, there was an intense conflict between them at the end.

Explanation:

· Mr. Cleaver think it is the Lafite ‘45

· Tibbs Spanish red

· Arguing because of wine types

Evidence:

· “That is not a Lafite ‘45. Mr Cleaver swung round in his chair and stared at the butler. There’s the empty bottles beside you to prove it!” (Dahl)

Explanation:

· Arguing because of vinegar

Evidence:

· “Vinegar, the butler said, is the enemy of wine. It destroys the palate.” (Dahl)

· “but when you slosh vinegar over your food into the bargain, then you might just as well be drinking dishwater.” (Dahl)

Concluding/Transition Sentence:

· Conflict conclusion -- Monsieur Estragon and Tibbs left

Conclusion

Summary:

· wealth and prestige≠upper class Comment by Michael Ng: What do you mean by this? Could you elaborate some more?

· Tibbs: wine—luxury and enjoyable life-style

· Mr. Cleaver: wine—status symbol

Thesis Restatement:

· Author shows through classes, tastes, conflict