Proof read and correct my essay

I need you to read line to line to see if it flows and makes sense. 

Make sure all the sentence structures are correct. 

ADD DETAILS where necesarry  its okay to make it up if you have to

make sure commas are in the write place. 

ADD thrill to the essay 

doesn't get boring 

FIX and mistakes you see. 

make sure to read out loud so it makes sense.

REPLACE AWKWARD PHRASING